I read this, and I read your other poem too. Both of them are absolutely fantastic. Sonnets that are written properly are usually as cliche as... Really cliche. ;] How you wrote about the Ocean was fantastic, and new. I really loved it.

And this... This too... It makes me think. Maybe some people don't, but I like that. After every one of the first lines, and after the later sections, I mentally inserted the title, and it gave the poem a different feel. Really though... The title, and words... They're really done well. I would love to see more of your writing.

Woooooah, I actually get feedback?

Fuckin' awesome, man.

Anyway, I'm glad you liked it, and you've urged me to squidge up a few more things for the site. I have a few concrete pieces I'd like to put up, but the only way to make it stay up there is in txt format, and that screws up all the line breaks and makes it all icky D:

Though, thank you very much for actually looking :3

It's quite appreciated.

I like rice too ^^

It yummy

Good poem also, am I weird for looking through all your old stuff? I hope not, I just have nothing to do between classes, and I like your stuff too ^^

Oh, I'm very much obliged that you would take the time to dig through my gallery xD

I wish I had time to burn at work, but alas, no break at all D:

Cest Le' Vie

Besides, I had fun doing it ^^