Aww, he's already so cute <3 I would hug him even as a human.

Well, well. Here I am, back again, at long last! It has been such a long time, and I'm so sorry about that. Things just got in the way you know? Ah well, I'm back now, and I am more than ready to start writing reviews again; and ho boy, am I excited for this series! As I've mentioned before, I love canines, and there's no better kind of canines, than big, growy ones! Werewolves have always appealed to me, even when I was younger, being these huge, powerful, beasts who were still somewhat human - they were the perfect blend of human and canine, with a humanoid stance and a big, muscular furry body! So I'm sure you can imagine my joy when I saw you were doing a series with a werewolf character, and a big, growy werewolf at that! So, let's get going with my first review of Part 1 of Monster Bulk - Fur and Fang!

The scene opens with the train of thought of the protagonist of this story - truck Driver Barry Weelz, a pun so awful it makes me smile despite how terrible it is, following a rather unfortunate situation. As Barry ruminates on his job, he considers how wolf bites are emphatically not supposed to be an occupational hazard. That's assuming, however, that it was indeed a wolf, given that all that Barry could make out was a blur. With the wolf, or whatever it was now having run off into the night, all Barry can do is bandage up his wound and keep going.

Overall, this is a nice little introduction to the story, we've been introduced to our character, and we already know what's going to happen to him. However, while I do like this introduction, there are a few things that I think you could do to really improve the whole thing.

First off, since Barry had to be outside his truck to be bitten, that naturally raises the question of 'Why was he outside his truck?' Right now, with no explanation, it just seems a little bit strange, so a reason would promptly avert that. It doesn't need to be a detailed, complex reason, even a passing mention would do just fine! Just something to explain why he was in a position to be bitten would be smashing. On that note actually, I just want to take a moment to say that I really like how it was a bite that started it all, it's very thematically appropriate. I know it's a werewolf story, so of course it'll have a bite, and so on, but... I don't know, there's just something about it that feels slightly different, I just can't put my finger on it, you know? Either way, I hope I was able to explain my point clearly enough!

My next suggestion would have to be about Barry bandaging his arm. Now, it is more than reasonable to assume that Barry keeps a first aid kit in his cab, that's not the issue, for lack of a better term. My suggestion is this: Add some emotion to the scene, by which I don't mean making Barry sad or angry, although he could be angry! Rather, adding in some sort of emotion, perhaps a grimace or a curse as he binds the wound. Basically, anything that suggests that the wound is actually a source of discomfort, instead of a mild annoyance. It's a minor thing, that I'll admit, but then again, it's the little things that make the difference.

Another suggestion I have, also with Barry himself, when you mention he's from Salt Lake City. That's not the issue though, not at all. What I'd like to suggest is a brief mention that he's actually going back there at the moment. I think that would help that detail feel a bit more naturally introduced, if that makes sense?

Anyway, my final suggestion is to inject a little splash of realism and a slight hint of comedy too. Given that Barry has just been bitten by a wild animal of some sort, when he mutters about how this is real life - that old 'this is reality' trope, which I must say, I really like that you've used! - he would also probably worry about needing to get that wound treated. An expensive, time-consuming trip to the ER, a rabies shot, concerns that someone in the US who's just been bitten by an animal would reasonably have. Oh, also, a quick grammar correction - it's 'I'd be turning into a werewolf right now.' rather than 'I'd be turning in a werewolf right now.'!

So, there we are, I hope those points I raised have been of some help; I'm always eager to help improve these stories, because god damn are they fantastic! You have such incredible ideas, how do you do it? You have so many truly wonderful series, this one included! Speaking of which, I hope you enjoyed this review, and stay tuned for more coming soon! Until then, take care, and I hope you have a fantastic night!

Hi ^^
Again, I understand

Wow, that must be the most criticisms you gave me in one review!
Not that I complain
It's good corrections ideas, and I just made them

As for how I do it, like I said, I bullshit things up, or I copy from movies/books/games/whatever

Of course I enjoyed it, and again, I can't wait for the next one!
Take care too!

Hey there!

Ha ha, yeah, you're right actually! I guess that is the most criticisms I've given in one review. I'm glad that's okay though, I only give such critiques in the hopes that it helps to improve your writing, and I'm really glad you like them!

I guess media does give us plenty of examples that's true! Oh, the things in media... so many wonderful scenes! I'm sure we'll have even more series inspired by them in the times to come...

Heh, anyway, I'm thrilled you enjoyed it, so I'll catch you for the next one soon! See you later!

Oh, also, I have something to say that I realised I didn't mention in my reply!

I absolutely love how when Barry is cursing the animal, he hopes a Hunter will get it. That is a lovely little piece of foreshadowing there, and it could also possibly fall under dramatic irony. That was a stroke of genius there, nice one!

Yeah, the idea came right as I was writing
Foreshadowing yes, but not really dramatic irony, as you'll see