just wanting to hear comments about how you think it's going.
perhaps I could use some tips on how to keep it interesting.
Clean story, no suggestive material or comments, please.
perhaps I could use some tips on how to keep it interesting.
Clean story, no suggestive material or comments, please.
Category Story / All
Species Wolf
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 5.3 kB
I like it very much. Overall, my only bit of critique would be not to start off the chapter with a pronoun for people who might just dive right into this part. But, you move along what's happening here well...
I hate how excluded Kunari feels here. It reminds me of my own life. I almost wish he would just blow up at them and take off into the forest. Let them have to chase after him to "protect" him. Sometimes we do those we love no favors by keeping them in the dark. We are just as capable of putting them in harm's way by isolating them as we are by exposing them to danger...
I hate how excluded Kunari feels here. It reminds me of my own life. I almost wish he would just blow up at them and take off into the forest. Let them have to chase after him to "protect" him. Sometimes we do those we love no favors by keeping them in the dark. We are just as capable of putting them in harm's way by isolating them as we are by exposing them to danger...
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