Roland thinks he scored a neat box of chocolates for Valentine's Day. What he really bought is a ticket to a whole new adventure!
Category Story / Transformation
Species Wolf
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 35.1 kB
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Mmm... Didn't feel toon-ish enough for my tastes nor did I get a good fee for the reality shift part of this story. It was such a sidenote that one could've assumed that the only real shift was that the protag was now a bot & likely only they would recall or care about that detail, assuming they even do at all by the end of the story. Like the fight itself did give a big feel of that the world was now toonish but you didn't really make a good feel of the pre-toon world for the shift in reality really feel well real for lack of better words i could say.
Still did enjoy the story. Just only really got a feel of the robotic shiftings & the new superheroic role that the NewBot finds themself in while was expecting a little more I guess of the toony side or better feel of how the reality shift was doing form beyond the protag's POV or at least that might've gone across better with a better free of the pre-shift world be like I think? But good story I'm sure you can only do better :3
Still did enjoy the story. Just only really got a feel of the robotic shiftings & the new superheroic role that the NewBot finds themself in while was expecting a little more I guess of the toony side or better feel of how the reality shift was doing form beyond the protag's POV or at least that might've gone across better with a better free of the pre-shift world be like I think? But good story I'm sure you can only do better :3
Thanks for the feedback. This story, while I enjoyed writing it, was done fairly quickly to jump on the Valentine's Day train before it left the station and could've included more toony antics. I've been meaning to expand on it with a sequel of sorts for a while, I hope I can muster the creative energy to finally get working on that.
Hope the sequel if you do so, explores the nature of the Reality Shift that clearly was vaguely implied to have happened form a NonToon relaity into a Toony Reality... With our now robotic protag flashbacking to how their life was like until they ate the robo V-Day chocolates then poof everything was different. Think that might help give it a full Toon TF vibe then the more Robotic TF vibe that just happened be apart of a now toony reality that was so in the backgrounds of the shift that just... You could even just assumed it was always been toony & therefore no real "toon tf" had happen... Not a bad thing if that was was you were going for, but I assume it wasn't given you tagged this as having a Reality Shift.
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