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This is an old project. If memory serves, this is five years old. Done very quickly as my final project for Creative Writing I. I think I pulled an A on this thing. Not too sure.
This is Gabriel LaVedier, Prototype Version 0.1. He's still a lupine, but has begun a steeping into noir-ish sensibilities. This will deepen, first into Silver-age superpowers, then, after a species change, into Golden-age mystery man status.
Private Investigator with a past attempts to defuse the anger of his lover while dealing with some unhealed wounds.
This is Gabriel LaVedier, Prototype Version 0.1. He's still a lupine, but has begun a steeping into noir-ish sensibilities. This will deepen, first into Silver-age superpowers, then, after a species change, into Golden-age mystery man status.
Private Investigator with a past attempts to defuse the anger of his lover while dealing with some unhealed wounds.
Category Story / All
Species Wolf
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 48.5 kB
You were stretching your literary muscles here, packing three different stories -- a romance, a detective story, and a high-IQ action thriller -- into one. They don't coalesce in a prose work this brief, and given what Candace has to offer to Gabe, the ending, for me, is unconvincing as hell. The individual sections, though, are very well written: they're harbingers of the witty, allusive, pinpoint prose you're writing now.
I had trouble with this from the outset. It was a nightmare to pace and plot. An ambitious project that I couldn't even begin to pull off but still tried, and was quite satisfied with, for the time.
I'm sure all artists hate their old work, right?
There was meant to be a sequel to this, called "Ex-lover's lover" that went a little further into the past to dredge up some more heartache and a nice murder mystery. There was also a prequel/companion piece to this story called "Shards." It was a short piece that took place the night of the explosion.
As you noted, I was not fully formed, and my attempt to do a flashback trasition using only sound effects obviously failed. That was my big written experiment piece. Back to the drawing board. (Gabriel survived the explosion, being tossed onto a nearby building. The ear plugs he inserted just before saved his hearing, but he was one battered-up, bloody, broken and damn near crippled piece of meat. It's nice to have deep-pocketed friends who owe you one, or two.)
I'm sure all artists hate their old work, right?
There was meant to be a sequel to this, called "Ex-lover's lover" that went a little further into the past to dredge up some more heartache and a nice murder mystery. There was also a prequel/companion piece to this story called "Shards." It was a short piece that took place the night of the explosion.
As you noted, I was not fully formed, and my attempt to do a flashback trasition using only sound effects obviously failed. That was my big written experiment piece. Back to the drawing board. (Gabriel survived the explosion, being tossed onto a nearby building. The ear plugs he inserted just before saved his hearing, but he was one battered-up, bloody, broken and damn near crippled piece of meat. It's nice to have deep-pocketed friends who owe you one, or two.)
There were supposed to be about five or six parts. A short detective serial, in other words. "Ex-lover's lover" got more into the past relationship, the part after that delved into Gabriel's past, then there was supposed to be a part with Candace's mother, a nice, homey Louisiana Swamp Witch.
So, despite the flaws, I think it wasn't that bad.
So, despite the flaws, I think it wasn't that bad.
I had trouble with this from the outset. It was a nightmare to pace and plot. An ambitious project that I couldn't even begin to pull off but still tried, and was quite satisfied with, for the time.
I'm sure all artists hate their old work, right?
There was meant to be a sequel to this, called "Ex-lover's lover" that went a little further into the past to dredge up some more heartache and a nice murder mystery. There was also a prequel/companion piece to this story called "Shards." It was a short piece that took place the night of the explosion.
As you noted, I was not fully formed, and my attempt to do a flashback trasition using only sound effects obviously failed. That was my big written experiment piece. Back to the drawing board. (Gabriel survived the explosion, being tossed onto a nearby building. The ear plugs he inserted just before saved his hearing, but he was one battered-up, bloody, broken and damn near crippled piece of meat. It's nice to have deep-pocketed friends who owe you one, or two.)
I'm sure all artists hate their old work, right?
There was meant to be a sequel to this, called "Ex-lover's lover" that went a little further into the past to dredge up some more heartache and a nice murder mystery. There was also a prequel/companion piece to this story called "Shards." It was a short piece that took place the night of the explosion.
As you noted, I was not fully formed, and my attempt to do a flashback trasition using only sound effects obviously failed. That was my big written experiment piece. Back to the drawing board. (Gabriel survived the explosion, being tossed onto a nearby building. The ear plugs he inserted just before saved his hearing, but he was one battered-up, bloody, broken and damn near crippled piece of meat. It's nice to have deep-pocketed friends who owe you one, or two.)
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