awesome donkey story

Why thank you very much!

your welcome
fan of animal transformations
donkeys are my fave

Same here! But I guess posting a donkey tf story gave me away ;))

lol welcome to the donkey club all are welcome

Hawww

that a boy heres your complimentay welcome basket with fresh carrots an hay

That was a pretty long detailed story. First off the setting. In the middle of nowhere and in a storm. Makes for a good atmosphere of isolation and nobody can help you when you're being transformed. I also liked the whole idea of giving your mind body and soul if your identity is found out on a witch's domain. Especially since it came from a drivers license Reminds me a bit of death note for some reason.

Aw, thank you! I’ve actually never seen death note, but I’ve heard it’s really good. So I’m honored by the comparison

Yeah just the whole name thing made me think of that. Also i liked the ending. Makes me think about how there's more to the story after it ends.

Oh, there’s definitely more to the story! Hopefully you’ll enjoy it :)

Hmm. A little rough in some places. You have a tendency to jump back and forth between present and past tense, and there are multiple typos and misspellings of words, not to mention points where you had two dialogue from two people together in the same paragraph. That being said, it wasn't too bad overall, once you got to the main changes. You were a little repetitive with your talk of hide and gray fur growing in. It made me a little confused at times with how much it was used.

I loved how you used the art of the true name, though. That was a neat angle. The mischief in her nature was also a nice touch. that being said, she'd better watch out. Methinks that man will have some words for her. :P Is Andie lost forever now? Also, will we be seeing more of these characters soon?

Thank you for your critique! You actually keyed in on some issues I was having. I wanted to experiment with first person, but I found I had trouble making interesting sentences that stayed in the correct tense...so I may need to stick to the past tense haha. As for the repetitive stuff in the change, I wrote that piecemeal over several months, so I’m sure that added to the choppy time and repetitive wording, since I was basically starting over every few paragraphs.

But I plan on doing better with the next story! I have more planned for these characters, so stay tuned!

Quite intriguing! I like the tug of war when it comes to Nate's human sensibilities and the play on the magic of one's name. I also enjoy the richness of Abigail. The fact that she's inexperienced and fighting against the anxiety of having her plaything taken away makes her very dynamic, and her personality is an utter playground for psychological dissection. I would love to see her interaction with Rick and see more of their relationship explored sometime. The history there is palpable.

Overall, you've enchanted me with these characters. I look forward to seeing more. (And I can tell you right now that Moth and Azura are both eager to cross paths with Abigail the Wild.)

Aw, you’re so sweet! ^^ I have some plans for these characters, not to worry! Hopefully I can get those out a little quicker this time ;)

Marvelous! ^w^ I can't wait to see

^^! Also, Abigail would love to make some new magically-inclined friends. I think she would very much enjoy Moth and Azura's company!

Very well written and entertaining! Thanks for sharing it with us. I look forward to reading more of your stories, especially if they feature donkeys.

Thank you for the kind words! Knowing me, there is always a good chance of donkeys ;)

Excellent first story! :3 Really liked the way you handled the mental and physical changes; not to mention you had a great level of detail with everything! ^^ Really liked the witch/name angle as well! Will be awesome to see more from you!

Thank you for the kind words! I've loved your stuff for a long time, so I really appreciate your approval! ^^

Aw, glad you like it! ^^ and of course! You're definitely off to a rockin' start with TF literature with this one! :D

My goodness very good first story. Don't know how I missed this one in my donkey tf searched. Great detail, good pacing. Only issue is a few typos and grammatically errors. Otherwise its just as good if not better than any of the donkey stories I've written.

You have some fantastic ideas in this story. Using the full human name to transform the victim, starting the transformation by shoving hay into his mouth, it's very good. I will mention that there are some grammar errors there, and also I will mention that the setting is a tiny bit cliche, but I'm glad it doesn't start with the words "It was a dark and stormy night...". However, you have written around most of what makes the setting cliche, which has been done very well.

I really want to see more with this, I would really love to know what happens next. Overall, this is a great story and I would love to see you continue writing. :D

Thank you so much for the feedback! I have a continuation for this in the works! I've been neglecting it for a while due to real life obligations, but I'm going to be getting back into it very soon! Hopefully with less grammatical errors this time, haha. I'm getting more comfortable reading my own writing without cringing, which helps the editing process a whole lot ;)

If you're interested, I have an alt account where I post some other one-off stories  my_tf_rp

A well done, as much a fun read, you manipulate the reader while knowing the outcome the plot continued to thicken, and Yes I liked the exceptionlly well done detailing of the transfromee.

Great story!

A magical story told well, of a man demeaned until he began to accept the inevitable outcome...

This is such a great and detailed story. I love how the witch slowly took over poor Nates mind >u<