What a pleasant surprise ! Coming across the BD tag I stumble upon a whole new BD fanfic, from a whole new fan ! As I am trying to expand the fandom and make a whole community, I was very delighted !
And you write the characters very good, I read this in their voice ! And so in-character, we could read Allfire's naivety and obvliousness but still kindness, and Flame's sadness, anger, heartbreak, love for Flicker and hatred towards Loungelot and that dreadful Code, the fact she has to write for her being a torture to her was even very well shown, with emotions, I could picture all her faces and feelings (the Flacker feels, she always has to put the Code before her love life as Flicker wants too, she hates it so much, FEEEEEEELS) And Loungelot being thought to be a hero being sad about his squire by Allfire, what a cute naive king x) and what a bastard Loungelot is as we know ! Flame smirking about him sounds like something she would be sadistic about.
Frankly, keep going this way, that was awesome !