Quite stopping. And don't know if it's the right word to describe the feeling in English, but that is how I experience this. The last sentence stopped me to think... and yeah. That's about it. Almost shocking. I read this as a cry of help in the chaotic and fast modern world. But I bet there are many ways to read this.

Anyway, enjoyed reading this a lot. Very nice little piece, good work.

Thank you for your comment, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

It's... well, it's somewhat how I felt this morning. Writing such things out is great catharsis. I also remember reading about a film called "The Bridge", which I really want to see, which is in fact about people who do jump from the Golden Gate Bridge... So, there's my inspiration.

Anyway, thank you again.

I like it - especially that last phrase. The middle line of dialogue seems to read better if you'd said 'I've thought about it' or something, but that's just how I'd say it. It's a lovely reflective scene, and conjures up a lovely cinematic feel to it.

You're absolutely right. And what you see is an occasion of the artist being so close to what he's working on that he can't see things straight. I was trying to get a certain feel, and within 100 words that's pretty difficult.

Originally, the first speech was something along the lines of, "Please, think about it... this can't be what you want to do with your life." I changed that line, but neglected to change the reply.

Gah. I fail. But that's what editors are for.

Thank you for your comment, though. I'm really glad you like it.

Oh, just trying to support a fellow writer. I just recently completed a 1000 word task on a similar challenge and had to nip and tuck just a bit to hit the limit - so I can only imagine what 100 words it like!

*smiles* Always nice to meet a fellow writer.

And in response to your comment about it having a cinematic feel... eh. I tend to 'see' things in my head before, or as, I write them. With this one, the first part of text to come was the end... I wanted that step forward, the bridge and the sea.

To me, it seems that he was wanting to kill himself all along, and barriers were the people who wanted to help him, yet to him he thought that they didn't understand, didn't want to understand--uncaring--and just wanted to stop him from achieving peace. How tragic...

*just smiles softly, and says nothing... a gentle light in his eyes*

Thank you for commenting.

'except for the ending' absolutely wonderful...

*hugs...

V.

*hugs back* Thank you...

That means a lot to me.

*hugs more*

Nicely written. Even at the end people are trying to stop him from doing what he wants wth his life. A sad story but nicely done.

Why, thank you, sir. I'm surprised, pleasantly so, that these are still being read, and delighted that you enjoyed it.

Thank you again for your kind words. They are very much appreciated.

Most welcome my friend. I was looking for inspiration to continue my writing and I started looking through old works. After a glance I realized I had never read the other tarbh challenges so I decided to check em out. Hope you're still writing my friend. Take care.

I don't write very much. I've got myself boxed in with fears and worries and though I have ideas for stories, and numerous ones unfinished, I don't write. I feel bad about it, but I still don't write. Silly old drake I am, eh?

Thank you again for your kind words and thoughts. This old drake does appreciate them, very much.

Yeah, I'm the same way. Hopefully we both get back to doing what we enjoy.

Thanks for the watch. Hopefully I'll write something soon.