I like doing smoke rings. :3

I love smoke rings too ^.^
Though normally I'm watching my buddies blow them

The first two lines, I like how their separate. Together they wouldn't look right, and they give a verr good opening into the poem. :3 'Why does the morning dove sing? When the beutiful notes don't last ery long' -- I think this is a really good example of how people should live each moment as it comes ^..^ That whol paragraph, a really good annalagy for life in genrel, That and the sand paragraph. Although the sand is another slightly diffrent version of the dove, it gives a small expression of ever-changing things.The last paragraph, about the endless cycling sun, is yet another one, but this time how some things always stay the same. The fact you used the same line for the beginning and ending, It really illustraits how you feel, and the complexity of everyday life. All in all, I LOVE this poem. I have a really good feeling of how it gives off emotions it points out, and those it doens't. Sorry for the long reveiw! :P

-Your Critic-

Fuzzy

(P.S
if ya can't tell, I was typing that as I read your poem X3)

Thanks ^^
I'm glad you liked the poem,
The smoke ring thing was just an enterance into the poem, something that I do to pass the time and think about things on a little bit of a deeper level.
And you pretty much got what the poem was supposed to do