Hmm. On a whole, I'd give this one about a 7.5 out of ten. Again, a solid transformation, but there were a few sloppy points. The biggest one was probably the way you inserted the rumor of the transformation out of the blue. It probably would've been a little smoother and less smack-in-the-face if you'd had him do some research on his computer or something like that, before finally stumbling across a forum that covered this mysterious virus. That would also serve to show some of Sly's hacking skills. He wasn't nearly so skilled as Bentley, but I believe there was a time or two where he had to use his own skills for that purpose in the video games, or something similar. I enjoyed your talk about the paws and their padding. That was a nice touch. Though you did misspell snot at one point and had it say snout, instead. You may want to work on researching anatomy a little more to help improve your descriptiveness as you describe a body changing, too. That being said, as a whole, it was okay. I'll be interested to see if he finds a set of clothes, cane, and a mysterious book to match his new form.

Thanks for the constructive criticism. I'll admit, I felt I rushed this a bit and didn't really dive into this naturally as I could have. Though, in my defense on one point, I'm not tooooo familiar with Sly as I would like to be. I've barely scratched the surface of the games, so I don't know much of the characters, their personalities, and lore.

In the future, would you like the chance to maybe look over a story of mine or two to provide some feedback? You offered some good advice so I wouldn't mind hearing more on other works.

If I have the time, sure. I wouldn't mind.