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Toon It Up: Books to Brawn (FtM)
Completed a two-week length short story, this time for 
Kiluke, who wanted some more, fun, toon action. This time, we got some female to male action here. Enjoy!
Transformation Includes:
Anthro Wolf Transformation
Female to Male TG
Muscle Growth
Toonification
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Kiluke, who wanted some more, fun, toon action. This time, we got some female to male action here. Enjoy!Transformation Includes:
Anthro Wolf Transformation
Female to Male TG
Muscle Growth
Toonification
If you like stories like this and wish to support or maybe just tip me, check out my Patreon here!
Or, if you want a story or interested by chance, I'm currently open for commissions! Check out the journal linked here to see what I have to offer.
If you want to see more of my stories and commissioned art, but of the more human variety, check out my other account:
OtherFiringwall. Category Story / TF / TG
Species Wolf
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 132.8 kB
I'm a sucker for muscle growth and mental changes, so you had me hooked with this one. There were points in the exposition that may have requried a certain amount of work. That being said, I enjoyed the sequence as you changed her arms, hands, etc. And clearly, she was drawn to be much more, shall we say suggestive? :P Or should I say HE was drawn? ;) Not bad. I only skimmed, of course, so I can't give you an in-depth analysis. I can say there were a few points where the words didn't quite fit grammatically. I can't recall why. Like I said, I was skimming. Overall, still a good story with only minor errors, so people can still read it and know what's being said and focused on. Keep up the good work. Your writing is improving.
Though, admittedly, I do think the character of the mouse scientist was a little underdeveloped, personally. Then again, I guess it depends on what cartoon he was drawn for, too, huh?
Though, admittedly, I do think the character of the mouse scientist was a little underdeveloped, personally. Then again, I guess it depends on what cartoon he was drawn for, too, huh?
It wasn't so much the development as how you basically put a big fluorescent sign around his neck to that effect. I suppose that's what I found so off about him. You essentially slammed the gas pedal on the vehicle to speed into the transformation itself. I find if you're going to write a story, you need to make every character seem as real or as surreal as possible, depending on how their character is meant to be. Otherwise, it winds up being more offputting to the reader and makes it harder for them to immerse themselves in the story.
Well that is a fair criticism, but there really is no time. This is limited at six pages and this isn't really his story at all, so he's given enough oddity to separate him from other toons that appeared in other Toon It Up tales. I understand, but this story wasn't really meant to be very deep or character focused like others I've written, like the Doggie Mommie one I shared with you.
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