It has a bit of a long opening which is fine, but its really quiet... i think it needs *something* although I don't know what. the lyrics are no less understandable than skinnypuppy, although they seem a little high... not pitch but high frequency static thats a bit off. I take it you added some sort of distortion. it sounds like the vocals are through an old PA System.

its really good, aside from missing something. also the lead synth is a little cheesy sounding. melody is fine. it also ended abruptly.

As far as a WIP goes, this is pretty awesome.

Haha alright. Yeah its hard to find the correct distortion for vocals with the resources at hand to where its not piercing. Great description about the PA system. I like that :]

yeah, a lot of it is bound to change, but it had been some time since I submitted anything with music, so I'd thought that some may be interested.

needs louder synth thingy :D

Yeah I need to add a lot of shit to it, also, a rarely do vocals so this is like WHOA I ACTUALLY ENJOY THIS.

first half sounds like the intro too something bigger, I like it. Feels like I'm just waiting for it to go off :P

Yeah a lot is bound to change, and I just wanted to throw something up to show I'm not dead within the musical arts. Im hoping this to come out REALLY spectacular. We'll see.

YOU'RE THE WORST MUSICIAN
jk i love the beat. I GAVE YOU A PROPER CRIT ALREADY

ITS NOT ENOUGH I MUST HAVE MORE.
MORE

ill just poop in your toilet and not flush

The super creepy bass is cool. In my own preference I'd have given the drums A LOT more power though.

Yeah, I did, gave them a lot more variety as well and changed some stuff up. I love that creepy bass.

Nice dude :) i like it. is that you singing?

haha, yeah. Its me going along in a half-monotone voice. Not a lot of variation so :| *shrug*