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story by- Me
story picture cover by my great friend- DragonessAnimations (Thanks Amy) :)
link to the picture- https://www.deviantart.com/dragones.....draw-761226643
that enough info, now lets get right into the story, enjoy :)
Calling All Comas
it was a nice sunny day in Metropolis City were we see our beloved hero's working on the rocket sled again (if you don't remember tools of destruction) Ratchet- i cant wait ti fly this thing when its done Clank. Clank- lets just hope you don't take any short cuts or fly it in to a Gadgetron blimps this time. Ratchet- relax Clank i already learned my lesson it not like im going to do it again, maybe. as Ratchet and Clank continue working just as they are about done with the rocket sled they receive a distress call. Ratchet- almost done with the rocket sled i cant wait to ride it again. Clank- incoming call. Mayor of Black Water City- hello HELLO anyone there we are being attacked who ever gets this message please save us im to old to die! *call brakes up*. Ratchet- looks like we will have to finish the rocket sled later come on Clank lets go save Black Water City.
later when Ratchet and Clank arrived at Black Water City they soon to realize that the city is a total mess and the criminals that are attacking the city were part of the Thugs 4 Less group. Ratchet- what are Thugs 4 Less doing here. as Clank scanned one of the thugs. Clank- it appears that they are going after the Mayor. Ratchet- we cant let that happen it was bad enough that the hover board track is trashed we have to save him let go kick some Thugs 4 Less butt.
as Ratchet and Clank going through Black Water City all guns blazing taking out thug by thug the dynamic duo manage to save the Mayor and Black Water City. Mayor of Black Water City- oh thank you thank you for saving me Ratchet and Clank. Clank- we are glad to help. Ratchet- yeah same here by the way why did Thugs 4 Less came after you? Mayor of Black Water City- well i was doing some businesses with there leader of making a peace treaty and just before l left i found a chocolate cream filled doughnut in there break room and i thought it was a good idea to help myself however that doughnut that i eat was actually the leaders and i guess that why they came after me. Ratchet- wow they came after you all because of a doughnut *laughing* oh man no wonder they were so easy to beat.
but little did they know that one Thug 4 Less member was still kicking and armed with a plasma coil, as the Thug 4 Less member takes its aim at Clank Ratchet see's the thug taking an aim at Clank and quickly pulled out his combuster and jumps in front of Clank and both fired, Ratchet hits the Thug 4 Less hand and destroyed the plasma coil along with it. Thug 4 Less member- I SURRENDER. as police arrest the thug Clank look the other way to see Ratchet on the ground wounded very badly with a electrical burn on his chest.
Clank- RATCHET NO NO NO RATCHET. as Clank ran to Ratchets side Ratchet started coughing up a little blood. Ratchet- Clank *coughing* i don't feel... feel so good. then ratchet passed out. Clank- HELP SOMEONE GET HELP. as paramedics rush to assist they loaded up Ratchet on a gurney and put an o2 mask on him too, they load him into the ambulance and Ratchet was rushed to the hospital. at the hospital Ratchet was rushed to the ER.
Nurse- sorry sir but this is how far people can go right now. Clank- but that my friend. Nurse- i know but rules are rules but don't worry your friends in great hands we will keep you updated on the situation but for now im going to have to ask you to wait in the waiting room. 2 hours later, as Clank was waiting in the waiting room the Doctor that was helping Ratchet came to talk to Clank. Doctor- you must be Clank right. Clank- yes how is Ratchet? Doctor- well i got some good news and some bad news the good news is that we manage to heal all his wounds with some Nanotech but how ever the bad new is that you friend is in a comatose state.
Clank- how long how long until he wakes up? Doctor- could be a week or 14 days roughly but he is in a stabled condition so he should pull through trust me no need to worry. Clank- can i see him? Doctor- sure there's an hour and 22 minutes of visiting time left. Clank- thank you Doctor. as Clank went up to Ratchet room he sees Ratchet in his bed with and o2 mask on his face a heart rate monitor and an IV tube in his hand and frankly he looks kind like an angel when he's sleeping well not like in a coma sleeping but sleeping sleeping,as Clank went up to him he sat down in a chair and hold Ratchets hand and said,
Clank- Ratchet if you can hear me i want to say thank you, thank you for saving me i don't know what i would do without you and i wish you would wake up because your not just my friend your like a brother to me and... and... i love you, please come back to me. an hour and 22 minutes later, Nurse- Mr. Clank visiting hours are over. Clank- thanks for reminding me i'll be one my way. before Clank left the hospital he lifted up Ratchet o2 mask and gave him a kiss on the cheeks. Clank- i'll be back tomorrow i promise. as Clank puts ratchets o2 mask back on he left the hospital,
back at Ratchet house on veldin as Clank walk in grim saw Clank and walks to him. Grim- please tell me he's ok? Clank told Grim about what happen and Grim was shocked because Ratchet was like a son to Grim, but Clank make sure that he's ok and Grim is also going to visit Ratchet tomorrow. during that night when Clank went to sleep he dreamed that he woke up in the hospital right next to Ratchet in the chair he sat on and he was still holding hands with Ratchet.
but then all a sudden Ratchet started coughing up blood and violently shaking as Clank when to get help Ratchet's sharking stopped and coughing to and also breathing as he flat lined and the Doctors got there they so Ratchet life less in his bed. Doctor- Nurse get the crash cart NOW WE GOT A CODE BLUE I REPEAT CODE BLUE. as the Doctor charges up his defibrillator. Clank was holding Ratchet hand. Clank- god please don't take him please please please don't take him, Doctor- CLEAR *ZAP*. as the doctor using the defibrillator and Clank seeing Ratchet body jump from the shock from the defibrillator and Clank can only watch and pray that this is really a dream. Doctor- CLEAR *ZAP*. Clank- please ratchet please don't go please stay with me, Doctor- CLEAR *ZAP*...
Grim- wake up Clank your have a bad dream. Clank- wait what.... what happen. as Clank looked around and he was in Ratchet bedroom were he went to bed. Grim- you were have a bad dream so i though i would wake you up and its also 8 in the morning. Clank- what time dose visiting hours start? Grim- around 10 AM, and also Talwyn Apogee coming to visit Ratchet too. Clank- glad to hear that by the way to you know any good flower shops near by?
Grim- yes i do the building that has that Gadgetron vendor that Ratchet likes to use that a flower shop. Clank- thanks for the directions Grim. as Clank ran to the flower shop to buy some flower he see's Talwyn. Clank- Talwyn what are you doing here? Talwyn- buying some flower for Ratchet. Clank- what a coincidence because im doing the same thing too. Talwyn- i know what happens and i can not believe he saved you i guess hes not really a needy little bastard after all. Clank- true true well i'll see you at the hospital.
2 hours later, it was 10 am and Clank, Grim, and Talwyn went to the hospital to visit Ratchet around 2pm Talwyn left, but before Talwyn left she lifted Ratchet's o2 mask and gave him a big kiss on the lips, Talwyn- i love you Ratchet *Talwyn tearing up as she left*, and around 5pm Grim left, Grim- you are the best... *Grim starts to tear up and cry* the best son i could have ever had... i love you son *Grim left* and clank stayed right by Ratchets side until visiting hours are over which is around 8:30 pm as Clank was getting ready to go he lifted up Ratchet o2 mask and kiss him on the on his cheeks again, but getting a little bit of lip stick on him because before Talwyn left she kissed Ratchet on the lips, Clank- please please wake up. Clank said as he puts ratchet o2 mask on and walking out of the room and hospital,
during that night Clank had an idea and that idea was to finish that Ratchet had started and that is the rocket sled as Clank took the rocket sled to Ratchet garage he started working on it just in case if Ratchet wakes up he will have a surprise waiting for him, 6 days later, Clank finished the rocket sled and during this time it was 11 am so Clank hurried over to the hospital with more flowers. as Clank entered ratchets room he sat down in his chair holding Ratchet hand and said,
Clank- Ratchet if your are listening i finished building the rocket sled for you i hope you will wake up soon because i... i... i love you.... please wake up, then all a sudden Ratchet tail started to wag and Clank herd a moaning sound and then Ratchet opened his eyes. Clank- Ratchet your awake, Ratchet- *moaning* were am i? Clank- your in the hospital. Ratchet- so that explains the hospital gown and the o2 mask on my face and this thing on my chest that is attached to the heart rate monitor and the IV in my hand... was i on life support Clank?
Clank- yes you were in a coma. Ratchet- a coma how long was i out for? Clank- 8 days and 12 hours 31 minutes and 10 seconds. Ratchet- that long man i thought i was out for a day or so well it looks like i got a lot of work to do with the rocket sled when i get out of the hospital, Clank- no need to while you were in a coma i thought i would do something nice for you for saving my life so i finished the rocket sled for you.
Ratchet- what would i do without you buddy. as ratchet reached over clank just to hug him. ratchet- *Ratchet tearing up and crying* you have got to be the best friend a lombax could have ever asked for. Clank- there there... let it all out. Doctor- well well well i can see some ones wake how are you feeling Ratchet. Ratchet- emotional but great. Doctor glad to hear that because i have some good new. Ratchet- what the good news. Doctor- sense that your awake and the Nanotech taken affect really well we Decide that we might release you tomorrow at 5 pm if that all right i mean you can stay a little long if you have to. Ratchet- im not really in to hospital but i can stay for one more day. Doctor- ok thanks for letting me know.
during the 24 hour period Clank stayed right beside Ratchet until he regains his strength and to make sure he's doing well, the next day around 5 PM, Clank- here's some cloths that i brought you from home to. Ratchet- thanks pal. it is now around 5 pm and as Ratchet was being wheeled out of the hospital, Clank brought the rocket sled for Ratchet, when Ratchet got to the parking lot he was shocked and amazed when he saw the rocket sled, Ratchet- i am surprised on how a job well done you did Clank. Clank- it was nothing well nothing compared to you because... i love you Ratchet. Ratchet- i love you too Clank *ratchet and clank hoped on the rocket sled* let head home buddy. and so the dynamic duo rides of into the sun set on the rocket sled knowing that some sad stories should always end with a happy ending.
The End :)
story picture cover by my great friend- DragonessAnimations (Thanks Amy) :)
link to the picture- https://www.deviantart.com/dragones.....draw-761226643
that enough info, now lets get right into the story, enjoy :)
Calling All Comas
it was a nice sunny day in Metropolis City were we see our beloved hero's working on the rocket sled again (if you don't remember tools of destruction) Ratchet- i cant wait ti fly this thing when its done Clank. Clank- lets just hope you don't take any short cuts or fly it in to a Gadgetron blimps this time. Ratchet- relax Clank i already learned my lesson it not like im going to do it again, maybe. as Ratchet and Clank continue working just as they are about done with the rocket sled they receive a distress call. Ratchet- almost done with the rocket sled i cant wait to ride it again. Clank- incoming call. Mayor of Black Water City- hello HELLO anyone there we are being attacked who ever gets this message please save us im to old to die! *call brakes up*. Ratchet- looks like we will have to finish the rocket sled later come on Clank lets go save Black Water City.
later when Ratchet and Clank arrived at Black Water City they soon to realize that the city is a total mess and the criminals that are attacking the city were part of the Thugs 4 Less group. Ratchet- what are Thugs 4 Less doing here. as Clank scanned one of the thugs. Clank- it appears that they are going after the Mayor. Ratchet- we cant let that happen it was bad enough that the hover board track is trashed we have to save him let go kick some Thugs 4 Less butt.
as Ratchet and Clank going through Black Water City all guns blazing taking out thug by thug the dynamic duo manage to save the Mayor and Black Water City. Mayor of Black Water City- oh thank you thank you for saving me Ratchet and Clank. Clank- we are glad to help. Ratchet- yeah same here by the way why did Thugs 4 Less came after you? Mayor of Black Water City- well i was doing some businesses with there leader of making a peace treaty and just before l left i found a chocolate cream filled doughnut in there break room and i thought it was a good idea to help myself however that doughnut that i eat was actually the leaders and i guess that why they came after me. Ratchet- wow they came after you all because of a doughnut *laughing* oh man no wonder they were so easy to beat.
but little did they know that one Thug 4 Less member was still kicking and armed with a plasma coil, as the Thug 4 Less member takes its aim at Clank Ratchet see's the thug taking an aim at Clank and quickly pulled out his combuster and jumps in front of Clank and both fired, Ratchet hits the Thug 4 Less hand and destroyed the plasma coil along with it. Thug 4 Less member- I SURRENDER. as police arrest the thug Clank look the other way to see Ratchet on the ground wounded very badly with a electrical burn on his chest.
Clank- RATCHET NO NO NO RATCHET. as Clank ran to Ratchets side Ratchet started coughing up a little blood. Ratchet- Clank *coughing* i don't feel... feel so good. then ratchet passed out. Clank- HELP SOMEONE GET HELP. as paramedics rush to assist they loaded up Ratchet on a gurney and put an o2 mask on him too, they load him into the ambulance and Ratchet was rushed to the hospital. at the hospital Ratchet was rushed to the ER.
Nurse- sorry sir but this is how far people can go right now. Clank- but that my friend. Nurse- i know but rules are rules but don't worry your friends in great hands we will keep you updated on the situation but for now im going to have to ask you to wait in the waiting room. 2 hours later, as Clank was waiting in the waiting room the Doctor that was helping Ratchet came to talk to Clank. Doctor- you must be Clank right. Clank- yes how is Ratchet? Doctor- well i got some good news and some bad news the good news is that we manage to heal all his wounds with some Nanotech but how ever the bad new is that you friend is in a comatose state.
Clank- how long how long until he wakes up? Doctor- could be a week or 14 days roughly but he is in a stabled condition so he should pull through trust me no need to worry. Clank- can i see him? Doctor- sure there's an hour and 22 minutes of visiting time left. Clank- thank you Doctor. as Clank went up to Ratchet room he sees Ratchet in his bed with and o2 mask on his face a heart rate monitor and an IV tube in his hand and frankly he looks kind like an angel when he's sleeping well not like in a coma sleeping but sleeping sleeping,as Clank went up to him he sat down in a chair and hold Ratchets hand and said,
Clank- Ratchet if you can hear me i want to say thank you, thank you for saving me i don't know what i would do without you and i wish you would wake up because your not just my friend your like a brother to me and... and... i love you, please come back to me. an hour and 22 minutes later, Nurse- Mr. Clank visiting hours are over. Clank- thanks for reminding me i'll be one my way. before Clank left the hospital he lifted up Ratchet o2 mask and gave him a kiss on the cheeks. Clank- i'll be back tomorrow i promise. as Clank puts ratchets o2 mask back on he left the hospital,
back at Ratchet house on veldin as Clank walk in grim saw Clank and walks to him. Grim- please tell me he's ok? Clank told Grim about what happen and Grim was shocked because Ratchet was like a son to Grim, but Clank make sure that he's ok and Grim is also going to visit Ratchet tomorrow. during that night when Clank went to sleep he dreamed that he woke up in the hospital right next to Ratchet in the chair he sat on and he was still holding hands with Ratchet.
but then all a sudden Ratchet started coughing up blood and violently shaking as Clank when to get help Ratchet's sharking stopped and coughing to and also breathing as he flat lined and the Doctors got there they so Ratchet life less in his bed. Doctor- Nurse get the crash cart NOW WE GOT A CODE BLUE I REPEAT CODE BLUE. as the Doctor charges up his defibrillator. Clank was holding Ratchet hand. Clank- god please don't take him please please please don't take him, Doctor- CLEAR *ZAP*. as the doctor using the defibrillator and Clank seeing Ratchet body jump from the shock from the defibrillator and Clank can only watch and pray that this is really a dream. Doctor- CLEAR *ZAP*. Clank- please ratchet please don't go please stay with me, Doctor- CLEAR *ZAP*...
Grim- wake up Clank your have a bad dream. Clank- wait what.... what happen. as Clank looked around and he was in Ratchet bedroom were he went to bed. Grim- you were have a bad dream so i though i would wake you up and its also 8 in the morning. Clank- what time dose visiting hours start? Grim- around 10 AM, and also Talwyn Apogee coming to visit Ratchet too. Clank- glad to hear that by the way to you know any good flower shops near by?
Grim- yes i do the building that has that Gadgetron vendor that Ratchet likes to use that a flower shop. Clank- thanks for the directions Grim. as Clank ran to the flower shop to buy some flower he see's Talwyn. Clank- Talwyn what are you doing here? Talwyn- buying some flower for Ratchet. Clank- what a coincidence because im doing the same thing too. Talwyn- i know what happens and i can not believe he saved you i guess hes not really a needy little bastard after all. Clank- true true well i'll see you at the hospital.
2 hours later, it was 10 am and Clank, Grim, and Talwyn went to the hospital to visit Ratchet around 2pm Talwyn left, but before Talwyn left she lifted Ratchet's o2 mask and gave him a big kiss on the lips, Talwyn- i love you Ratchet *Talwyn tearing up as she left*, and around 5pm Grim left, Grim- you are the best... *Grim starts to tear up and cry* the best son i could have ever had... i love you son *Grim left* and clank stayed right by Ratchets side until visiting hours are over which is around 8:30 pm as Clank was getting ready to go he lifted up Ratchet o2 mask and kiss him on the on his cheeks again, but getting a little bit of lip stick on him because before Talwyn left she kissed Ratchet on the lips, Clank- please please wake up. Clank said as he puts ratchet o2 mask on and walking out of the room and hospital,
during that night Clank had an idea and that idea was to finish that Ratchet had started and that is the rocket sled as Clank took the rocket sled to Ratchet garage he started working on it just in case if Ratchet wakes up he will have a surprise waiting for him, 6 days later, Clank finished the rocket sled and during this time it was 11 am so Clank hurried over to the hospital with more flowers. as Clank entered ratchets room he sat down in his chair holding Ratchet hand and said,
Clank- Ratchet if your are listening i finished building the rocket sled for you i hope you will wake up soon because i... i... i love you.... please wake up, then all a sudden Ratchet tail started to wag and Clank herd a moaning sound and then Ratchet opened his eyes. Clank- Ratchet your awake, Ratchet- *moaning* were am i? Clank- your in the hospital. Ratchet- so that explains the hospital gown and the o2 mask on my face and this thing on my chest that is attached to the heart rate monitor and the IV in my hand... was i on life support Clank?
Clank- yes you were in a coma. Ratchet- a coma how long was i out for? Clank- 8 days and 12 hours 31 minutes and 10 seconds. Ratchet- that long man i thought i was out for a day or so well it looks like i got a lot of work to do with the rocket sled when i get out of the hospital, Clank- no need to while you were in a coma i thought i would do something nice for you for saving my life so i finished the rocket sled for you.
Ratchet- what would i do without you buddy. as ratchet reached over clank just to hug him. ratchet- *Ratchet tearing up and crying* you have got to be the best friend a lombax could have ever asked for. Clank- there there... let it all out. Doctor- well well well i can see some ones wake how are you feeling Ratchet. Ratchet- emotional but great. Doctor glad to hear that because i have some good new. Ratchet- what the good news. Doctor- sense that your awake and the Nanotech taken affect really well we Decide that we might release you tomorrow at 5 pm if that all right i mean you can stay a little long if you have to. Ratchet- im not really in to hospital but i can stay for one more day. Doctor- ok thanks for letting me know.
during the 24 hour period Clank stayed right beside Ratchet until he regains his strength and to make sure he's doing well, the next day around 5 PM, Clank- here's some cloths that i brought you from home to. Ratchet- thanks pal. it is now around 5 pm and as Ratchet was being wheeled out of the hospital, Clank brought the rocket sled for Ratchet, when Ratchet got to the parking lot he was shocked and amazed when he saw the rocket sled, Ratchet- i am surprised on how a job well done you did Clank. Clank- it was nothing well nothing compared to you because... i love you Ratchet. Ratchet- i love you too Clank *ratchet and clank hoped on the rocket sled* let head home buddy. and so the dynamic duo rides of into the sun set on the rocket sled knowing that some sad stories should always end with a happy ending.
The End :)
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I think it would be better than writing it as a play or a novel... in which the omnicient narrative is used to relate the place of events and when a character speaks, the dimensions are used that makes it more noticeable when they are talking about the characters and when the narrator is talking.
example:
(storyteller) They are in a room with yellow walls.
Character 1: blah blah blah... ~ He shrugs.
Character 2: blah blah blah! ~ Smile with happiness
doing it in this more orderly way allows readers to read it better and we do not get lost between the narrator and the character's notes... you should also consider using ":" at the end of a character name when you are speaking so that I can distinguish better when they are talking.
I think that's all I can help you with. Thanks for letting me help you improve. :3
example:
(storyteller) They are in a room with yellow walls.
Character 1: blah blah blah... ~ He shrugs.
Character 2: blah blah blah! ~ Smile with happiness
doing it in this more orderly way allows readers to read it better and we do not get lost between the narrator and the character's notes... you should also consider using ":" at the end of a character name when you are speaking so that I can distinguish better when they are talking.
I think that's all I can help you with. Thanks for letting me help you improve. :3
Well, that game was played in my childhood with my brother... I still have the PS2 discs in the original good box or I think... one of the best videogames that played the most in the offline multiplayer mode.
Well... The story was quite balanced... but I'm not sure why but it did not convince me... also some people had already forgotten who they were... but that's my problem...
Maybe the story moved very fast... and I did not get to get into it enough. :v
Well... The story was quite balanced... but I'm not sure why but it did not convince me... also some people had already forgotten who they were... but that's my problem...
Maybe the story moved very fast... and I did not get to get into it enough. :v
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