A bit too short...

Not to speak things profanely, but there is much improvement to consider. I mean no offence for this is my opinion and observation alone, especially if English is not your first language. Its shortness vied up incredibly fast paced non descriptive sequences which the reader can not imagine clearly. The tenses are also all over the map with past, present. and future forms. It is important to take your time with story development to flesh out detail and description which allows the reader to take the girth of what you right. It all holds in the balance of the rhetoric triangle of you the writer and your text vs. the audience. As you are new to writing anthropomorphic fiction the more anthropomorphic traits and terms you give your characters the more it is understood of their specification. Tails, ear shape, fur type, patterns and colorization, animalistic sounds and notions, ect. I did enjoy the nurses news to him about humanity in this world and by Dai's reaction it is easily seen he is A not from around town or B suffering Lear so bad he should just jump off the cliff know. So basically take your time think about what you want to present and do so. Practice and gain experience and you'll improve wondrously. Best of Luck with presenting the rest.

I like the premise of the story and the situation you present with Dai.

I would say though that you need to be more descriptive of the surrounds, the characters, etc.. By doing so, the reader can get a strong understanding and visual of what is going on and draw them deeper into the story and your world.

Good start :) *hugs*