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This is my first game that I have ever made. I did my best to create the story in Twine. I would like to know what you think of the game and how I could improve
The game is here http://www.mediafire.com/file/nz8q6.....Game.html/file I enjoy the game.
The game is here http://www.mediafire.com/file/nz8q6.....Game.html/file I enjoy the game.
Category Story / Transformation
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 12.4 kB
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Pretty good for a first attempt, and I like the concept. It's fun and has a lot of animal TFs, which are my favorite.
A few notes:
- Give it a proof reading pass; you have a few spelling errors in there (swards) and some grammar you could improve on to provide a bit more polish.
- You may want to develop your transformation descriptions a bit more; more detailed is always better.
- If you want to develop the game further, doing sections where the transformation happens over several options could be fun.
Overall, good stuff and I look forward to more :)
A few notes:
- Give it a proof reading pass; you have a few spelling errors in there (swards) and some grammar you could improve on to provide a bit more polish.
- You may want to develop your transformation descriptions a bit more; more detailed is always better.
- If you want to develop the game further, doing sections where the transformation happens over several options could be fun.
Overall, good stuff and I look forward to more :)
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