dont degrade yourself so much, you have talent

this is good poetry =3

Thanks man

This is quite a nice work. :3 Good form and rhyme.

Do not doubt yourself. You write your poetry well. It is an expression of self, sentience, and soul. I believe you portrayed that well. Poetry has many forms and styles, so don't compare unless your trying to mimic a style of another. Keep up the good work. You are also happy to joint the poetry guild if you like.

Alright thanks...

There's a poetry guild?

Yep http://www.furaffinity.net/user/poets-guild

Very beautiful and the rhymes are excellent! :D

Thanks!

Welcome :D

this is an interesting concept and you have done some interesting things with it. I hope you continue to try writing poetry.

I like how you have the poem set up in two halves, which are also each divided in half ...the first half of the poem abt fear, contrasting with acceptance in the second half, then within each half, you introduce the concept in the first half and in the second half of each half you present the parrellel Idea of the gathering places where these Ideas are (according to the poem, the philosophy of which I don't entirely agree to) shared and disseminated. the church and mosque being paralell to the restaraunt and theater.

I really like how you have used this structure to explore the concept you are communicating in the poem.

Haha, why thank you. I'm glad you took the time to go into detailed analysis on it. And of course, I may write more in the future =)