What an emotional story! This is superbly written. I like how you've written how Jimmy finally breaks down, it's so visual. The story doesn't come across as being emo at all, not in the sense of the emo culture today. Big props for this story.

See, sometimes, even I'm not sure if my story's caught the tone I wanted, just right.
The last time I tried to write Jimmy Lee into a scene like this,  Roochak thought it was way over done. Then again, that was a couple of years ago, by now, and I have a much better grasp of Jimmy's character. It really cheers me up to hear that you think I did everything right!

I get that sometimes. When I wrote the last chapter from my story, I was panicking that I stuffed it up big time. I guess readers understand things differently from writers. I think they're less critical, unless you get a real critic reading it.

Most readers are simply along for the ride, so they have no idea just how involved an author gets, in the creative process, when it comes to writing a story. That gives them a different, sometimes very nescesary perspective. Fellow writers, like myself, can straddle the line, seeing the creation that went into it, while enjoying the end result. That's why I'm so keen on giving you the best possible constructive critisim.

A genuine critic, on the other hand, deliberately doesn't give a twisted fig tree about the creative process at all, and doesn't care how much of the artist's soul went into the piece. They are like Statler and Waldorf, from the Muppet Show, ruling from on high, in their private box. They don't ask to be entertained, they demand it. And they tend to get very snotty if their every expectation isn't catered to.