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My first proper submission. About a father dragon and his journey through the hatching process.
Comments welcome and any helpful critisms
Comments welcome and any helpful critisms
Category Poetry / All
Species Western Dragon
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 1.7 kB
A very nice piece. The story is fantastic, with a good twist and turn to spice things up. I rather enjoyed it, and the rhyming helps it to flow rather well.
One thing that I found odd was the final line. It's very lengthy compared to the rest, and so it ends the poem on an awkward note. Apart from that, there isn't much to complain about. Great work.
One thing that I found odd was the final line. It's very lengthy compared to the rest, and so it ends the poem on an awkward note. Apart from that, there isn't much to complain about. Great work.
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