
end of my little comic. id have to say i like the first page the best. this didnt turn out how i wanted it to.
Category Artwork (Traditional) / Comics
Species Wolf
Size 915 x 1280px
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So, the one peering over the edge is pushed by the other and falls to his death?
I think this might have become clear to me if the "pusher" in the upper panel had not been leaning against the tree, but had been approaching or sneaking up behind the other; in other words, if his intention to push had been conveyed by the image.
I think this might have become clear to me if the "pusher" in the upper panel had not been leaning against the tree, but had been approaching or sneaking up behind the other; in other words, if his intention to push had been conveyed by the image.
hey why are we here? pretty much to share art and give and recive feedback, good and bad! i just love it when people give me advice! I want others to tell me if what im doing works or doesnt and where i need to improve.
now, yeah i never was truley happy on how this page turned out. the image in my head was waaaay cooler! to me it seems too big and too heavy on the black, maybe if i brought it in closer and turned it into a few panels instead.
now, yeah i never was truley happy on how this page turned out. the image in my head was waaaay cooler! to me it seems too big and too heavy on the black, maybe if i brought it in closer and turned it into a few panels instead.
Wolfie raised an important point:
> Maybe he gets saved by a third
> party! Ambiguity ROCKS! :D
When you leave the ending up to the reader, unless you have carefully set up an *inevitable* finale, the reader is free to assume that anything could happen -- and the reader would be absolutely right, because you have given that reader the freedom to end your story for you.
With that in mind... if you had ended with an image of the pusher pushing the pushee, with the pushee's eyes opening wide and his body teetering on the edge, then the reader would most likely *have* to assume that the pushee fell to his death -- because that would be the ending that you have spelled out clearly through your images.
Pusher, pushee... I apologize for these highly esoteric critical terms. ;)
Mark
> Maybe he gets saved by a third
> party! Ambiguity ROCKS! :D
When you leave the ending up to the reader, unless you have carefully set up an *inevitable* finale, the reader is free to assume that anything could happen -- and the reader would be absolutely right, because you have given that reader the freedom to end your story for you.
With that in mind... if you had ended with an image of the pusher pushing the pushee, with the pushee's eyes opening wide and his body teetering on the edge, then the reader would most likely *have* to assume that the pushee fell to his death -- because that would be the ending that you have spelled out clearly through your images.
Pusher, pushee... I apologize for these highly esoteric critical terms. ;)
Mark
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