I ain't into poetry, but I dig your stuff.

I love Coyote as well. He's the original trickster god, an archetype I've always admired.

The moon as a bunny, eh? Can I have some of that mochi when she's done?

Man, I'm trying to think of some constructive criticism for you, but poetry of this nature is just so out of my element. Apologies. I appreciate your effort in writing this, though, and if you post more I promise I'll read it. :D

*laughs* Well, thanks for commenting anyway. :) A lot of people have this idea that they have nothing to say about poetry when I really don't believe that's true. Are there any phrases that particularly struck you as memorable? How did the poem as a whole make you feel? Was the idea of using a traditionally Eastern archetype for the moon successful in this context? Stuff like that.

I try to write poetry that people who don't read poetry will like and understand. ;) How am I doing?

-J

Ha! The only reason I am aware of the eastern imagery of the moon is because of playing Okami <=)

I think your poetry is very well done in the respect that I at least know what is going on. I can understand it much better than when I see someone trying to be deep and obscure. See, your poetic allusions make sense, and I appreciate that :)

If you want an example of the trite, deep™ type of poetry, pick up Only Revolutions by Mark Z Danielewsky. So much nonsense and forced mystery. -_- House of Leaves was much better because it had a coherent narrative, and all the da vinchi code BS served as an interesting supplement, but OR is pure masturbation.

But, I digress.

The poem impressed me as being an inner mono/dialog, enunciated by someone who is weary but cheerful in spite of. I really liked the imagery of the moon you used, and I found the passage about how she looks down on fear and death and childbirth very powerful.

I'm looking forward to seeing more from you, and thanks for posting what you have :)

It's.. beautiful! After reading this, I like your work even more. : )

Thank you very much. I really appreciate that. :)

-J

*Grins,* You're most welcome then! I'm just a bit sorry I don't have anything useful to say, seeing as in your description you're pretty ambivalent about it (maybe that's changed by now, seeing as it's been over a year). I just feel enchanted by the way it's told. It speaks to me in an intimate, honest way and reminds me that poetry isn't about the words themselves, but rather about how they're arranged to tell a story.

I hope you'll submit some more works here and not hide them from the world. ;)