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Azure and Oliver experiment.
Some mature themes.
Believe it or not, this is the first romantic piece I've ever written. Critique would be appreciated.
I thought I'd post chapter 10 and 11 at once as a Christmas gift to all those who've been following the story. Thanks for everything, consider this chapter your reward! ^.^
Some mature themes.
Believe it or not, this is the first romantic piece I've ever written. Critique would be appreciated.
I thought I'd post chapter 10 and 11 at once as a Christmas gift to all those who've been following the story. Thanks for everything, consider this chapter your reward! ^.^
Category Story / Macro / Micro
Species Vulpine (Other)
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 33.5 kB
Woot! Double update!!! Once again, very good job on these chapters. I think that you did fine with the romance scene considering that this is your first attempt at one and it it reflected well on the level of romance that you wanted to achieve or felt comfortable with. My one little critique/advice with these scenes would be, don't be afraid to describe them a little more detail. Perhaps describing what emotions or feelings are coursing through the character at that time. Anyhow that's my little tick so feel free to ignore it, lol. And by the way... Merry Christmas to you!!
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