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Infinity Quest Preview by Caleb Arentz
As many of you probably know, as of April, I've been working on my own original science fiction setting for the last 15 years. It's be a labor of love that I'm going to get finished by the end of the year and hopefully released in 2020. It's been a lot of work worldbuilding, creating the characters, working out the technology and its affect on the universe, and everything else imaginable. I thank everyone whose come to my streams while I work on this, and everyone whose supported me here over the years I've persisted with this. Thank you all so much, and I hope this taste gets you as excited as I am for the series to follow!!
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After reading the first chapter, this is my main observation: you break conventional rules. Today's convention usually dictates a "hook" of some kind. You start off mid-action and allude to conflict. Yet, the conflict seems secondary as you paint a vivid picture of your world. Prose and diction clearly present themselves as strengths. The protagonist is obviously distraught, but I don't know if I particularly care. Let it be said this changes as we get to the very end. On the whole, I personally enjoyed myself, but it does seem slow. This isn't necessarily bad, but it is definitely unconventional by contemporary standards.
Thank you so much for taking such a deep look into the preview! I'm blown away with the thought put into your comment and your analysis! I'm very glad that by the end of it, you feel more invested or attached to the character and his emotional state! If you don't mind me asking, was there a specific part where you started to get that change?
I didn't think it forced. It might come across that way, but if it is supposed to be a "Utopian" society, then it is reasonable to assume they'd have a system in place to identify those who's physiology is showing signs of psychological distress. So long as the robot is not sentient, only an advanced specialized A.I. (i.e. - good for the specific tasks and related tasks it is programmed for), then it seems logically believable.
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