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hello, so this is my first time posting a story in this format, first time posting anything here
i came across integration awhile ago and instantly fell in love, sc-fi, non fetish furry macros, military and society and awesome universe, so i'm happy to finally take part in help building this universe
any writing tips and criticism would be appreciated, and i need to change something for it to be cannon i will
umm so yeah, that's what i have to say
Edit: added a thumbnail, I probably should have made that and added it before posting but oh well
i came across integration awhile ago and instantly fell in love, sc-fi, non fetish furry macros, military and society and awesome universe, so i'm happy to finally take part in help building this universe
any writing tips and criticism would be appreciated, and i need to change something for it to be cannon i will
umm so yeah, that's what i have to say
Edit: added a thumbnail, I probably should have made that and added it before posting but oh well
Category Story / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 68.6 kB
The main writing tip/feedback I would give is to break up the paragraphs based on who's speaking, and to make the dialogue stand out more so it doesn't all blend together as much. (I tend to make dialogue bold so it's easy to tell what is character speech and what is narration)
The content is very sweet, but due to how rapidly it switches from speaker to speaker, as well as from dialogue to prose, makes it hard to follow what's going on.
The content is very sweet, but due to how rapidly it switches from speaker to speaker, as well as from dialogue to prose, makes it hard to follow what's going on.
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