This is so sick.

Genial gemacht , aber richtig begeistert war ich vom abgang am schluß .
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Danke dir!
Wollt mal ein langsameres outro schreiben da die meisten sachen von mir großteils abrupt enden

FTW ! ^^

Strong intro, Very nice.... Then, when the harmony... 3 part is it?... comes in, I like hte way that everythign seems to melt into one "voice" but you can still hear the distinct "colours" of everything.... if that makes sense at all.
<3 solo, 'nuff said there. xD
As for the lyrics, Ilike the way you manage to make them flow so well, without a Rhyme scheme.. that's often my problem is I want To write, but an effect is taken away by the fact that every 2/3/4/8/whatever lines rhyme with each othe. Very nicely done there!
The ending I liked as well, how after this Strong, Dricing Verse, you have this Still driving, but even more mysterious outro

Heh, sorry bout the long Comment. ^.^ I really can't see much of anything to improve with the song, so Keep up the good work, Jaris! I like it a lot! ^.^

Wow thanks a bunch for this long and detailed comment
It's really interesting to know how people sense my music, cause as the songwriter I've heard the unfinished song so many times, so I'll never know how it feels to hear the finished song at the first time.
I had some problems with the first part of the lyrics. It was hard to record, because there are just short brakes to breath in. But it was a good training for me^^

and sry for my crappy english XD

It's not a problem.. I try to give critique when I can. ^.^ Yeah the writing and then performance part of it are learning tools that sort of go hand in hand because as you've said about the breathing. And The whole part about never really knowing what it feels like, I get that a lot when I'm writing a story or something and I know where I went wrong, what's going to happen.. I never get that " oooooOH!!!! ^.^ " feeling that one would from seeing it for the first time.
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Now, as for your english, It's very good... better than most of my friends' english that I talk to at home or every day in real life xD only a few errors that are more because of the way I'm used to talking than any really Grammatical/Vocab faux pas... though, there aaaarrrrre quite a few commas in there... [ I'm sensitive to that becuase of 7th grade.... I'll never forget the ump-teen comma rules she harped on us about every day xD ]

Ah thats good to know ^^
I'll try to use less commas.

zed ist wirklich absolut egozentrisch und du unterstützt das auch noch ;P

och, da giebt es ja noch viel schlimmere

Hast du das Lied gesungen? Deine sind ja besser als meine lol xD

Jo hab ich gesungen ^^
Es hat sehr lang gedauet bis ich mal diese Qualität bei den Aufnahmen erreicht habe. Und du wirst es bestimmt auch schaffen. Es ist alles nur übungssache.

Fantastic! This perfectly suits that sneaky hardcore raptor thief and it sounds wonderful.

*Sways to it, then raves to it, then sways to it again, then rumbles sadly as it ends*

Thanks a lot =)

*pushs the replay button and raves with you*

*Rumbles approval and starts raving again*