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This is a little story I wrote for 
TesconWhitepaw inspired by an amusing conversation we had together.
Contains nothing that anyone would find offensive that I'm aware of.
TesconWhitepaw inspired by an amusing conversation we had together.Contains nothing that anyone would find offensive that I'm aware of.
Category Story / Macro / Micro
Species Wolf
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 13.8 kB
"Small little" tables is a bit redundant. "Tiny little" is more common if you want to use a colloquialism.
There's a spot where there's a missing paragraph break before a new speaker begins.
Overall, though, it is an awesome bit of dread and foreshadowing. Might consider adding a casual mention at some point of how the family had been sheltered from the realities of the "big" world by the patriach. They seem awfully casual and happy considering that they surely must know how micros usually get treated in this world.
There's a spot where there's a missing paragraph break before a new speaker begins.
Overall, though, it is an awesome bit of dread and foreshadowing. Might consider adding a casual mention at some point of how the family had been sheltered from the realities of the "big" world by the patriach. They seem awfully casual and happy considering that they surely must know how micros usually get treated in this world.
*Grumbles* I knew I was making a mistake when I started reading this story... Was bad enough that this was to be the last of the ones you've posted... But then you had to go and leave it on an ultra omega cliff hanger to boot! And now I have absolutely nothing to save me from the torment of worrying about that fate of that poor, family of micros.... You DISGUST me bunny. ^.^
That being said, the story was incredibly well written, I felt. And yes of course there little paw related bits thrown in there that I couldn't help but love. But more than anything, it was the underlying tension to the whole story that really pulled me. Particularly towards the end, at the dinner. The whole thing reminded me of something that you would see in a Quentin Tarantino film... That slow build of tension, brought on by little more than an exchange of dialogue. Where your left feeling as if the characters words are completely betraying their emotions. Mm yes, incredibly well written indeed. :)
Ugh, so many unanswered questions though.. Really makes me wish I knew more about Tescon, if nothing else.. So that I'd have a better chance of determining his true intentions in the story. And yes, I have to admit that there was a really big part of me that was hoping that the whole thing was a ruse on his part, to help break Arnov out of his fright and to get to know him better.. But my instincts tell me otherwise. :)
That being said, the story was incredibly well written, I felt. And yes of course there little paw related bits thrown in there that I couldn't help but love. But more than anything, it was the underlying tension to the whole story that really pulled me. Particularly towards the end, at the dinner. The whole thing reminded me of something that you would see in a Quentin Tarantino film... That slow build of tension, brought on by little more than an exchange of dialogue. Where your left feeling as if the characters words are completely betraying their emotions. Mm yes, incredibly well written indeed. :)
Ugh, so many unanswered questions though.. Really makes me wish I knew more about Tescon, if nothing else.. So that I'd have a better chance of determining his true intentions in the story. And yes, I have to admit that there was a really big part of me that was hoping that the whole thing was a ruse on his part, to help break Arnov out of his fright and to get to know him better.. But my instincts tell me otherwise. :)
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