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Weeeeell I ment for it to be more informative but I just followed what came out of my head xD, I'm not used to this but I try xD please keep a look out for ch 2 because this was just the beginning! Enjoy!
(and by the way I know I didn't explain what animal Alan was and that's because I don't know I was a furry when he was alive so I never asked him so sorry for that )
(and by the way I know I didn't explain what animal Alan was and that's because I don't know I was a furry when he was alive so I never asked him so sorry for that )
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Vulpine (Other)
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 26 kB
That was very interesting, and I was surprised at the flow of the plot so far.
Though it was kind of hard to picture some of the characters, you should try to describe a bit about them (one of the hardest things to do in writing). That and it was a bit hard to read the dialogue, try to make a new line for each time someone different speaks, or for a new paragraph after they have said something, it helps the reader and you.
Otherwise, you did a fine job!
Can't wait to read the next part!
Though it was kind of hard to picture some of the characters, you should try to describe a bit about them (one of the hardest things to do in writing). That and it was a bit hard to read the dialogue, try to make a new line for each time someone different speaks, or for a new paragraph after they have said something, it helps the reader and you.
Otherwise, you did a fine job!
Can't wait to read the next part!
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