Its wonderful

1.) A tree
2.) The 4 Seasons

YOU sir...is correct! 8D

I hope you enjoyed my little allegoric adventure! :3

\(^o^)/

It sounds like its about the earth to me o.o Each suitor is a season, the first was spring, second was summer, third was Fall and fourth Winter.

A very beautiful piece my friend and if my the person before me was right about it being a tree, well, that makes sense too and was my second guess =P

Heee, it is indeed a tree; although, a Mother Earth answer is a reasonable interpretation as well, especially if you got the four seasons portion! ;3

I'm glad you like it, my striped friend! ^^

Very clever! And i also agree with Tekwolf, it is a tree to its seasons. which makes the final lines much more obvious. At first I was wondering why "she" should return to the first of her suiters, but what choice does a tree have but to bear the burden of nature? For that matter what choice do any of us have but to bear the burden of our own natures?...alas, a poem of response this would inspire...but not today.

A VERY detailed response, Neo! ;3

The ending originally didn't denote her returning to the first...HOWEVER, I changed it on a whim, and I think it's a stronger finale because of that; after all, it's a cycle. =D

Your pensive mind serves thee well! ^^


ALSO...your new avy kicks ass, man! I'm lovin' the green (favorite color) eyes, black leaves (woot--nature!) and prismatic scarf! 8U

Thank you very much! I try, after all does not a piece that has much effort in it deserve comments of the same? Meh X3

OMG, I say the SAME thing about overly epic art! D8

You sir...are the AWEsome! :U

*purrs* Thank you X)

excellent work :D
although i believe those before me have figured it out :p

Hehe, yeah, it wasn't too difficult to figure out, but I usually don't try to make my poems overly cryptic! =P

Painting the subject in a unique manner is what's most important to me! THAT'S where the magic comes in! ;3

I appreciate your comment and fave, Yavy! ^^

yes thats why i enjoy your work so much & its always fun to read ^^

And I shall surely continue to write in such a manner, because it's a style I'M comfortable with and thoroughly enjoy! ;3

and thats what matters, not what others think :o
and although this may seem contradicting to my previous statement, would you mind giveing an opinion on my poem? ill give you a cookie ^^

Hehe, I'd be happy too; after all, you told me that I inspired you, so I feel obligated and honored! ^^

Though, I need to work on a few literature assignments tonight; I'll be sure to get to it, when I can, my friend. =)

thank you then ^^

hehe ;3 a most EXCELLENT poem indeed ^_^ The giveaway line had to be

Alas, three months is all it took
for me to hate his leaves!--

But it still sends quite the adept personification =D

MOST excellent you say?! 8U

Why that's MOST excellent! U8

*sips tea* (-_9)

Oh ho ho ho ho ho! \(^o9)/

Well, I got half the riddle right. I have half a wit, I suppose. XO3
Once again, you impress with your words. Your quatrains make me bleed with envy of their awesomeness. XO3

Oh dear...shall I go fetch a box of tissues, or perhaps a roll of paper towels if the said bleeding is profuse?! x3

Much obliged, my dear bolf; I try! ^^

Absolutely beautiful. I wish my mind could pop out something of such quality.

Thank you very much, for the lovely comment, Woods! :3

The fave and watch are also greatly appreciated! =O

I certainly won't let you down with my future works! (^___^)

beautifully well written! It had me guessing for awhile.

Hehe, thanks! :D

And did it now? x3

*nods* yep

I recall you working on this one! I also recall my brain was not working particularly well at the time. XD

It's absolutely flawless! Time and effort well spent!

I likes me some effort in mah poems! 8U

Indeed, I do recall mentioning this to you a while back. ^^

Many thanks for the comment, my friend! \(^o^)/

Her suitors are all two-faced...she may as well become a polygamist and marry all 4.

This sir, deserves to be printed and framed! What grandeur! What splendor! What glory!

Your rhythm and meter, is as always, precise and inviting. It beckons the reader to follow and flows easy like a gentle stream. The language you chose is perfect; brought of high English but at a level all could understand.

As for the concept...its just amazing. Nature is your specialty, this I know, but you have rather outdone yourself. This is among the highest of your creations, without doubt.

Get yourself a publishing contract, and makes us books, darn you!

(o.o)

Wow...thanks! ^^;

Those are some really flattering words, Scier; I'm VERY appreciative of them! D8

Hehe, a publishing contract would be nice...one day. =/

But first, this poem will be critiqued by my advanced poetry class. I'm sure they'll have much to hate about it! lol

Tell those free-verse touting post-modernists that their opinions mean nothing to a true artist, such as yourself. :3 And be snobby about it. A top hat would accent the point nicely. X3

Ah, but there, Master DeeDee, is where poetry's true form takes shape. People can view it differnetly, and still be right.

I for one, see it at face value (for you have to love extended metaphor) of a girl who cannot find love. However, the fourth suitor gives me chills-- puns aside-- because I see him as an angel. Go figure. ^^ And he leads her ont he right path simply by offering a kind word and a coat. c:

Well, you are certainly correct about multiple interpretations, and I would happily agree with you if my poetry class didn't BASH this particular poem so badly! xD

It was simply dreadful, to them. =/


1.) A few found my consistently perfect meter (which is just something I do really) annoying, as it distracted them from the content. ~no comment~ (>.>)

2.) Some people didn't even see the seasonal metaphor. ~again, no comment~

3.) One girl said this is hard to accept, because trees can't move (as in walk). ~huh...?~

4.) The teacher said the poem suffered from not having enough "show instead of tell" imagery. =/

5.) Bottom-line: because they didn't know what the poem was trying to accomplish (aside from sounding pretty), they said it had little impact and that I should rethink my retelling.


Anyhoo, I'm glad you enjoyed it for what it is and were able to make a fun and insightful interpretation. ^^

So long as it was fun to read, I accomplished my goal. :3

Your teacher needs to go on some 7-year-long mediation in a mountain contemplating how much he's jealous of how he can't write as well as you can. Seriously, godieinaholenowkthanx. ;(
Speaking of which, I'd like to ask a favor. Could you show him/her The Epic of the Caterpillar? I'd like to see what he says about that. Make sure to remind them it's from a 13 year old and they shouldn't expect perfection. :/

I'm glad I got this right ^^ It was a fun and stimulating exercise, and you certainly handled the execution of it VERY well.

Now do one with the four basic elements :P That's what I thought you were going for at first, until the third suitor.

Hehe, I can see how you'd think that, until that two-timer Fall came! 8U

Hehe, 'twas fun to imagine and write. ^^