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After mysteriously escaping, the otter goes to his tribes secret fortification to rest and arm himself properly for whatever adventures await him in this struggle against these invaders.
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Category Story / Scenery
Species Otter
Size 80 x 120px
File Size 4.9 kB
You have some amazing world detail. Through that you do a fine job of developing and depth your world piece by piece for your audience to see it. Your word choice is also strong and good as well. Your plot seems interesting and could go many places. Now, their is very little character depth and development as of now, but each chapter you have been building up slowly but surely to that degree so no harm as of now. You have remained from most hurtful archetypes and have a pretty good foundation for just practice. So best of luck to the rest.
Thank you for your kind words and insight. With some of my recent pieces, I've been trying to develop better environment writing. I'm also practicing with word choice so I'm glad a fellow writer approves.
I actually surprised to get a positive review. The four pieces I've posted thus far with this story were all written quickly and without proofreading. So, thank you for reading, and the compliments.
I actually surprised to get a positive review. The four pieces I've posted thus far with this story were all written quickly and without proofreading. So, thank you for reading, and the compliments.
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