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Well this is going to be the last of the introduction chapters, the real adventures of their stories I hope will be alot better and I may write differently the adventures and side stories differently.
Although I've already short plots planned for the future adventures I really have very little idea on how i'm going to put them down, if you've read this far down you're probally going to be smart enough to comment - so please do I appreiate any feedback so I can improve my writing, making me writing it more enjoyable and your reading more enjoyable!
I can't thank ~pierrot90 enough for getting me started writing these stories, it's good fun to do and a cool little hobby.
And so decided to carry on writing.
Not because I want people to read and enjoy it(although thats great too ^^) but because as i said it's a great hobby and I plan to keep writing for a bit.
Although I've already short plots planned for the future adventures I really have very little idea on how i'm going to put them down, if you've read this far down you're probally going to be smart enough to comment - so please do I appreiate any feedback so I can improve my writing, making me writing it more enjoyable and your reading more enjoyable!
I can't thank ~pierrot90 enough for getting me started writing these stories, it's good fun to do and a cool little hobby.
And so decided to carry on writing.
Not because I want people to read and enjoy it(although thats great too ^^) but because as i said it's a great hobby and I plan to keep writing for a bit.
Category Story / General Furry Art
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 37.5 kB
Well You have done an excellent job with developing out your characters from chapter one. Some of the dialogue is witty and rather enjoyable. More detail and description what help bring your world to life and expand it allowing your audience to explore it. This chapter opened and ended well. The first one did not. To the first chapter a beginning is supposed to captivate a reader and draw them in usually through dialogue, action, or some form of novelty. However, I see that you are definitely developing through out these chapters and are getting a grasp of things. So good job thus far, best of luck with the rest.
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