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Heads up, for a better reading experience, you can check out this chapter on SoFurry
Spyro has been gone for a week, First Flight Day is finally here and our poor boy Flame is yet again in a place much too high up for his liking!
With this chapter, we're finally bringing the flashback timeline to a close, closing the loop, if you will! (And if you think this is a mess, just wait for the time travel sequel!)
I hope you all enjoy it! As always, let me know what you think in the comments!!
Edit. As if borking the PDF wasn't enough, I see now that I might have uploaded an earlier version without some of the typos fixed. I think I've managed to fix most issues now but if you find anything that doesn't make any sense, do let me know!
As always, the artwork is made by the amazingly talented
. And thanks to 
for convincing me to write a 'short one-shot' to go with the art. Oh, since this chapter is way too long to add in the submission description, you'll have to download the PDF!
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Eastern Dragon
Size 120 x 111px
File Size 144.5 kB
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Oh you're right about that! Something's wrong with the PDF. I'll fix it.
In the meantime, you can read the story here on SoFurry!
https://www.sofurry.com/view/1571781
In the meantime, you can read the story here on SoFurry!
https://www.sofurry.com/view/1571781
Flame and Spyro had so many great moments in this chapter where I really sort of just cheered for them and shared in their joy. I loved their little "mating dance" on the way to Dark Hollow. Yet as you're reading it, you know how it's gonna end and it's terrible.
Maybe Flame overreacted a little but honestly, I'd probably react the same way in his situation. It must be tough to have the one dragon who always believed in you suddenly say that "you're not good enough". Btw, I really love how the chapter ended where chapter 1 starts. Sort of a nice way to bring it all together!
As always, keep up the good work and can't wait for the next one!
Maybe Flame overreacted a little but honestly, I'd probably react the same way in his situation. It must be tough to have the one dragon who always believed in you suddenly say that "you're not good enough". Btw, I really love how the chapter ended where chapter 1 starts. Sort of a nice way to bring it all together!
As always, keep up the good work and can't wait for the next one!
Wow.... You made it... Really awkward somehow for flames and yet it's so them. Amazing confessing each other and then Spyro just leave without giving a proper goodbye, like every dipshit who leaves with no reason for another person. What a truly sad goodbye. Now flame is just waiting just to get dissapointed.
a few spelling mistakes here and there but entirely readable
"time travel sequel" *confused screaming intensifies*
ok now to get to the real review of this chapter:
the elders seem like cunts and i was ready to slap astor upside the head with a tank barrel before firing it right into his twitching corpse and turning whats left into mulch
the bronze dragon is a dumb bastard and i wonder what he was doing in the 10 years without spyro (nothing good i hope)
spyro sticking it to the class and the elders feelsgoodman
flame learning to fly even if it was on the second try feelsgreatman
spyro and flame taking a shortcut with flame learning how to breath fire and using that to win and taunt the rest of the class was a great touch
flame can spiral dive now he just needs to do it well on fire from his own breath and we have a real trick
finally got to the kiss AHHHHHHHHHHHH (and a side of AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW)
the argument was heart breaking and i just wanted to go hug flame very hard
ember trying to be matchmaker for flame was kinda cute but she could have eased off a bit more
and we are right back to where we started this tale and i think i have a few ideas of where flame might go in the present day timeline after he left the elders temple and im excited
and last but not least AHHHHHHHHHHH THE KISS AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
"time travel sequel" *confused screaming intensifies*
ok now to get to the real review of this chapter:
the elders seem like cunts and i was ready to slap astor upside the head with a tank barrel before firing it right into his twitching corpse and turning whats left into mulch
the bronze dragon is a dumb bastard and i wonder what he was doing in the 10 years without spyro (nothing good i hope)
spyro sticking it to the class and the elders feelsgoodman
flame learning to fly even if it was on the second try feelsgreatman
spyro and flame taking a shortcut with flame learning how to breath fire and using that to win and taunt the rest of the class was a great touch
flame can spiral dive now he just needs to do it well on fire from his own breath and we have a real trick
finally got to the kiss AHHHHHHHHHHHH (and a side of AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW)
the argument was heart breaking and i just wanted to go hug flame very hard
ember trying to be matchmaker for flame was kinda cute but she could have eased off a bit more
and we are right back to where we started this tale and i think i have a few ideas of where flame might go in the present day timeline after he left the elders temple and im excited
and last but not least AHHHHHHHHHHH THE KISS AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
This is such a heartbreaking chapter.
Sure there is the funny grudge against Astor, but tears rolled over the more intense spots.
Btw. You might wanna give it a read again, there are a few small confusing points in the story where I think you mistook the characters and spelling.
But aside from the very small errors, it was still a good read, AS always of course.
Sure there is the funny grudge against Astor, but tears rolled over the more intense spots.
Btw. You might wanna give it a read again, there are a few small confusing points in the story where I think you mistook the characters and spelling.
But aside from the very small errors, it was still a good read, AS always of course.
Ah yes I made the mistake of uploading a previous version with some wrong names and stuff remaining. I think I fixed most of them but I haven't been able to go through it all due to work and stuff!
So if you could let me know what you found rjdt be super helpful!
Glad you were able to enjoy the chapter despite it all. It wasn't fun to write, knowing from the beginning how I will have to end it! I tried to write the scenes with Spyro and Flame in a way do that they'd have meaning regardless of how things ended up between them. Really liking forward to giving you guys the next chapter!
So if you could let me know what you found rjdt be super helpful!
Glad you were able to enjoy the chapter despite it all. It wasn't fun to write, knowing from the beginning how I will have to end it! I tried to write the scenes with Spyro and Flame in a way do that they'd have meaning regardless of how things ended up between them. Really liking forward to giving you guys the next chapter!
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