Unless this is meant to be in another language, imma have to call you on the lack of a rhyme scheme x3 Other than that, I'm likin it :D

Sorry, I'm not getting what you mean, could you explain? =3

none of the words rhyme xD

Aaaah!! XDDDDDDD This was written in spanish and translated word by word, which apart from making them impossible to rhyme, the whole meaning of the song was changed :3 That was the idea x3

that's uhm... pretty fail :C

Sorry, I just hate when ppl translate songs x.x

Haha, even the spanish version was something of an incoherence... BTW, if you'd like to re-write the lyrics, or know somebody that would, let me know =3 Or just grab the MIDI file from the gallery c:

How is this song fail at all? It's actually not a bad translation at all. If all you care about in vocal structure is rhyme scheme, you need to delve more into different genres. In a lot of songs, the story telling aspect doesn't use a rhyme scheme that's typical to AA-BB or AB-AB. A good example is the band Counterparts. They don't use hardly any rhyme scheme in their songs, but they still come out very emotional and lyrically genius.

Sorry for the wall of text, haha, but it's hard to insult somebody who did a good job on translating something when you have no backing as to why you think it was bad.

First off, I never said there was anything wrong with lyrics that didn't rhyme. But as you said, those are different genres. What he was trying to accomplish involved a rhyme scheme.

Secondly, are you SERIOUSLY trying to start an argument over something that was said almost a year ago? xD You have some serious problems, man.

that's uhm... pretty fail :C

Sorry, I just hate when ppl translate songs x.x

You said it right here, haha. He got some good lyrics out of the translation. I'm honestly not trying to start an argument, I'm just trying to understand why you told him that he did a bad job when he didn't. It's not your place to tell him he didn't do something well when he did the best with what he was given, and it turned out very decent.

It's called critique. You wouldn't know what that is because you're a typical furry drama whore xD

Oh damn. Staying civil isn't your strong suit, eh?

I didn't start drama, nor is there any occurring right now. It's between two people talking music and, at least in the beginning, being very rational about it. I stated why I believed your critique was incorrect and you came back with reasons why you thought they were. It has nothing to do with myself being a furry, or a "drama whore". I just wanted to get my point across that rhyme scheme is not as prominent today as it was before, and what he did with this translation was fairly good compared to what most do.

"... I believed your critique was incorrect..."

Wow... lol... That is the most hilarious statement I have ever heard. Do you believe everything you're saying, here? xD

Okay, I'm confused. My opinion is now funny? Can you explain where I went wrong with that statement? Because last time I checked, I'm entitled to my own opinion as well. For somebody who wants to call me out for being a typical furry "drama whore", you seem to just be stirring the pot.

I was stating that I found your critique to be lacking in the fact that the song was composed decently, given the translation. Rhyme scheme, while an important factor in some music, has lost it's luster in the past few years, and I can see why a song can still be good even if it doesn't have a definitive AB-AB or AA-BB scheme to it.

"... I found your critique to be lacking..."

lolololol

Good one.

You're a pretty funny kid.

I figure nothing I say will affect your responses. You're entitled to your opinion, as I am to mine, but word of caution: Don't bash those who want to provide an opposing force. You may find some logic in the opposition.

There is nothing logical about seeing someone else's critique being wrong or lacking. You're just special xD

ok this is ridiculous. People have the right to see others opinions as wrong. Critiques are opinions. Therefore when translated People have the right to see others critiques as wrong. In this case i agree with Vloggah. I believe your critique was wrong and lacking in reasoning. All you said was that "that's uhm... pretty fail" and then you said "Sorry, I just hate it when people translate songs x.x" I can see why you may not enjoy it with songs that are done poorly, but this song was very much the opposite. These lyrics mean a lot and the way they are sung work very well. Especially for a retro song. The instruments are very well done. They aren't complicated, but they definitely work well with each other and don't take away any focus from the vocals. I think this song was a complete success in what they were trying to accomplish. So yes, I also believe, your critique is wrong.

Wohouu... I didn't notice all this until now D:

x3 Thank you for posting your opinion!

Thank you very much for posting!!!