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So, I think Finley is about as crazy as he is going to get, which is good for his sake. Poor guy. Plus, if he were any more deranged, he would stop being endearing and become more or less annoying. He's walking a fine line right now as it is. Also, LOL @ Amelie in this whole chapter. What a wonderful dork she is. :) Oh... and Kramer and Finley could learn things from each other.
I apologise for any "choppiness" in this chapter. As you know, this is really a creative writing exercise gone way out of control and I have to upload at least 1 chapter a week. Otherwise, I would have liked to have worked on it more. I think it is just me, though. I'm being too tough on myself.
Get ready for the story to start picking up speed now! :) I gave you all a nice break at first to get acquainted with the two most main characters, but now the plot is about to thicken!
Also, pot sounds *so* good right now! LOL Especially after how hungry I got writing this chapter. :) Come on, Finley. Puff, puff, pass! He's hogging the spliff!
© S. Henson 2010
TO READ THE PDF FILE OFF SITE, PLEASE CLICK HERE: https://docs.google.com/fileview?id.....N2Jm&hl=en
Feedback appreciated! :)
So, I think Finley is about as crazy as he is going to get, which is good for his sake. Poor guy. Plus, if he were any more deranged, he would stop being endearing and become more or less annoying. He's walking a fine line right now as it is. Also, LOL @ Amelie in this whole chapter. What a wonderful dork she is. :) Oh... and Kramer and Finley could learn things from each other.
I apologise for any "choppiness" in this chapter. As you know, this is really a creative writing exercise gone way out of control and I have to upload at least 1 chapter a week. Otherwise, I would have liked to have worked on it more. I think it is just me, though. I'm being too tough on myself.
Get ready for the story to start picking up speed now! :) I gave you all a nice break at first to get acquainted with the two most main characters, but now the plot is about to thicken!
Also, pot sounds *so* good right now! LOL Especially after how hungry I got writing this chapter. :) Come on, Finley. Puff, puff, pass! He's hogging the spliff!
© S. Henson 2010
Category Story / General Furry Art
Species Dog (Other)
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 605.2 kB
It makes me wonder if Finley is either drug addled or paint addled to the eventual point where he pulls a Van Gogh. If I had any criticism it's the same as usual. More showing less telling especially towards the end, I really wanted to see Finley react more. The naked scene was funny and anyway... some how I get the feeling that Finley in spite of all his caution probably would forget to wear pants and parade around outside if his mind was to busy either worrying about something or if it were engaged on something else.
“Maggie. Marguerite... but Dad always called her Maggie,” Finley replied.
“Not if you met her,” Finley mumbled as he entered the parlour
i.. he's replying to something that amelie said but that did not get into the document, i think. >>
otherwise.... i believe the general response of "lol, finley" will suffice ;3
“Not if you met her,” Finley mumbled as he entered the parlour
i.. he's replying to something that amelie said but that did not get into the document, i think. >>
otherwise.... i believe the general response of "lol, finley" will suffice ;3
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