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I was going to add to the end but I came back to it later and the writer's block was back X.x
I think I improved it big time. Still want critique on this though. C:
BTW the descriptions and stuff aren't gonna be there in the end. They're just to help me think. Sorry about the uber-spoilers! D:
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I think I improved it big time. Still want critique on this though. C:
BTW the descriptions and stuff aren't gonna be there in the end. They're just to help me think. Sorry about the uber-spoilers! D:
This stuff © me
Category Story / All
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Size 120 x 68px
File Size 18.5 kB
It's much better and the first couple of paragraphs seemed alot smoother. I see that you uploaded the right format also!^_^
it's hard to teach creative writing because everyone tells a story so diffrently. But structure tends to more ridge and I think you should find a good balance between a brief paragraph and a block of text. Use parapraghs to seperate characters thoughts, actions, and feelings. It's also good for getting a setting in place for readers.
Good job w/ the re-write! Im also underone myself! :D
it's hard to teach creative writing because everyone tells a story so diffrently. But structure tends to more ridge and I think you should find a good balance between a brief paragraph and a block of text. Use parapraghs to seperate characters thoughts, actions, and feelings. It's also good for getting a setting in place for readers.
Good job w/ the re-write! Im also underone myself! :D
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