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Finally finished the second chapter hope you enjoy it (little bit of progression mostly just character background) There is a glossary of terms at the end it contains pronunciations of names and such in case your confused on how to say the names. If you haven't read the first part and prolougue please do so other wise you may not get the story.
this is the link to the pervious part: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3682905/
please comment on what you think its helpful really and tell me if there is any thing that i can do more on it'll help. This story contains only humans nor furries at all i know thats not really what FA is about but i thought i would post it here any way just to get it out there
this is the link to the pervious part: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3682905/
please comment on what you think its helpful really and tell me if there is any thing that i can do more on it'll help. This story contains only humans nor furries at all i know thats not really what FA is about but i thought i would post it here any way just to get it out there
Category Story / Human
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 93 x 120px
File Size 202 kB
When transition chapters, let things flow naturedly through events, description, and detail. Let the audience see it themselves. Also don't ever use second person and address the audience for it ruins flow. Such as the Abbey, show them that its not what is normally expected, don't tell them. Beyond that though most of your descriptions are yet again wonderful. Your plot also taking a interesting build.
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