I was inspired by a song and was able to make this. I am pleased with how this turned out and I'm going to keep working on this song a little more to perfect it. Any advice or critique would help me.

By the way, if anyone can guess what song it was that inspired me to make this I'll make them a song. If you don't know the name tell me where it came from. (that would be a hint). If you're a fan you'll know immideately... mabey.

Also, just for a little fun I'm going to put up a song almost exactly the same, there will only be one little change in the song. If anyone can tell me what was changed I'll make you a song.

I'm giving out alot of free songs so don't expect any of these to be easy.
oh, and no cheating, if its even possible.

EDIT: The second challenge will be with the complete song, I'll delete this song when the second one is up.
For the complete song check my gallery for "Neoplex"