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Click HERE to join my Discord server!Finally, a story from me. XD
This was a one-day quickie I wrote with my brother
max7345 and is the start of a series where we introduce all of our characters, and a bit of our universe, before we dive into the meatier stories we have planned. These won't be very long introductions but they will be nice and tickly all the same!Max the dog and Reisen the Zangoose are the two focal characters of our world and they'll, hopefully, be popping up in a lot of our works. But hey, we're not done yet, we've got lots more to show you!
I apologize if the story is a bit short -- it is a "little" introduction, after all. But I would like to work on shorter stories while also doing longer ones, whether it be a collab or standalone. Though, I think a short, to the point story will be a good start on this account. :P
Hope you guys enjoy it, and stay tuned for the next part of this series... next Friday! :D
Max belongs to
And of course, Rei belongs to me.
Category Story / Fetish Other
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 14.1 kB
This was a fantastic story my dude! So well written and in my opinion, the perfect introduction for these two adorable little fuzzballs. Love the playful little tickle fighting between the pair, could tell they both just adore having fun together and adore each other's company. True ticklish bros indeed. Great great work buddy, I'm looking forward to the next one
Thank you very much bro, means a lot~! Max and I had a lot of fun cranking this out and I'm glad you enjoy these two a lot. Means you'll just be more likely to love all the ventures these two have ahead of them~.
Can't wait to get to the next one... sadly, seven days wait. XD
Can't wait to get to the next one... sadly, seven days wait. XD
Adorable story Jake >w<
I love Max's and Rei's interactions
Although, if it was me the one to deal with a bad looser like Rei, I'd have tickled him much longer, maybe even sliding a brush on those cute feet xD
Also, I really like how you descrive all of the reactions on the games, when they tickle and when they are being tickled x3
I love Max's and Rei's interactions
Although, if it was me the one to deal with a bad looser like Rei, I'd have tickled him much longer, maybe even sliding a brush on those cute feet xD
Also, I really like how you descrive all of the reactions on the games, when they tickle and when they are being tickled x3
*applaude* gehehehe it was realy a fun and an adorable story Jake-kun ^w^ !
First of all : it was delectably well detailled but I'm used to this quality when my bith favorite writers work togethers , as short it can be your storyes are still so alive !! Realy I readed it like if I was looking at our both fuzzyball directly in theyr room ( glad they haven't see me or I had been forced to interact in the fight and certainly as the lee here X3...).
Second thing : it was a very good choice of introduction, a way to already gave us a town-name and a main ambiance in it ^^ I realy loved the first sentebce detailling the people's mind, in my mind it was like a movie's introduction, the kind where you see a sky view on different peoples and what they do ^^ so it was EXACTLY like that, I saw the scene directly again as if I was in it !
So realy it was great, now what to said about the story ? It was so cuuuuute and funny X3 !! A tickle-session for the bad loser than Rei seem be , profit of his friend's win-state for take him by surprise ! Fortunatly our doggy know all about Rei's spots and his belly was the good target to tickke for force our cat to give up his grab on Max );3...
but even afterctgat Rei find again a way to distract Max and succeded to take him by surprise again and targeting his big feet X3... this moment was just so adorable and the detail you both gave was just a plus for make the scene even more appealing so thanks yiu both for that !
Also the best moment was when Max success to remove Rei's boot, a big feet is a big weackness and if Max have big paws Rei have big chubby ticklish toes and sure when max success to put his finger between them well...Rei couldn't do anything morethan laugh and plea so it where the fight was fun ( especialy the part where our chubby kitty wiggled and splayed his toes X3....).
And all that for show the big friendship it have between Max and Rei, no any mad at the other despite thing have not pass like it was supposed at least it was pleasant for boths hehe ^^. Ho and the part where Rei pull off his other boot and put his big feet on the table gosh.. just imagin me this scene daaaw with Rei's chubby toes wiggling and Max's do the same X3... it make me want to do an illustration of it XD...!
Well all ttat for our both friend do a new game party was realy cute and shiw the big relation it have between them... is just the kind of I want have with my friends too hehe ^^ , realy thanks for this good moment Jake and max, our life is more happy each time you bith get out a new story, realy... thanns it was pleasant to read ^^.
And Hey Jake don't complaint, as short it seem be for you it's a very GOOD story ! Yiu have do the experiments before but long story don't encounter the success they desserve... problem is not everyone is able to keep interested in a story than is too long and they finish by rush it and all the efford you pull in was for nothing. So it's not the best way to begin a new account to begin with looong stories :p, and here you and Max have do a exelent job and a good choice !
Indeed the story is short but fun and pleasant to read, with all the details you both have put in even the lazyest reader ever will be able to enjoy the story frol it begin to it's end ;3. Also yiu even put a moral at the end and it was beautiful, it show despite all than can happen it's still good to laugh with a friend and it have plenty of way to do it ^^.
So here is my conclusion, it was an amazing and funny story than had all it need for encounter success, I hole lot of people will read it ! Well sorry for my loooong review but I realy needed to guve you my full feedback about like you stil do it for me and my draws >w< !
First of all : it was delectably well detailled but I'm used to this quality when my bith favorite writers work togethers , as short it can be your storyes are still so alive !! Realy I readed it like if I was looking at our both fuzzyball directly in theyr room ( glad they haven't see me or I had been forced to interact in the fight and certainly as the lee here X3...).
Second thing : it was a very good choice of introduction, a way to already gave us a town-name and a main ambiance in it ^^ I realy loved the first sentebce detailling the people's mind, in my mind it was like a movie's introduction, the kind where you see a sky view on different peoples and what they do ^^ so it was EXACTLY like that, I saw the scene directly again as if I was in it !
So realy it was great, now what to said about the story ? It was so cuuuuute and funny X3 !! A tickle-session for the bad loser than Rei seem be , profit of his friend's win-state for take him by surprise ! Fortunatly our doggy know all about Rei's spots and his belly was the good target to tickke for force our cat to give up his grab on Max );3...
but even afterctgat Rei find again a way to distract Max and succeded to take him by surprise again and targeting his big feet X3... this moment was just so adorable and the detail you both gave was just a plus for make the scene even more appealing so thanks yiu both for that !
Also the best moment was when Max success to remove Rei's boot, a big feet is a big weackness and if Max have big paws Rei have big chubby ticklish toes and sure when max success to put his finger between them well...Rei couldn't do anything morethan laugh and plea so it where the fight was fun ( especialy the part where our chubby kitty wiggled and splayed his toes X3....).
And all that for show the big friendship it have between Max and Rei, no any mad at the other despite thing have not pass like it was supposed at least it was pleasant for boths hehe ^^. Ho and the part where Rei pull off his other boot and put his big feet on the table gosh.. just imagin me this scene daaaw with Rei's chubby toes wiggling and Max's do the same X3... it make me want to do an illustration of it XD...!
Well all ttat for our both friend do a new game party was realy cute and shiw the big relation it have between them... is just the kind of I want have with my friends too hehe ^^ , realy thanks for this good moment Jake and max, our life is more happy each time you bith get out a new story, realy... thanns it was pleasant to read ^^.
And Hey Jake don't complaint, as short it seem be for you it's a very GOOD story ! Yiu have do the experiments before but long story don't encounter the success they desserve... problem is not everyone is able to keep interested in a story than is too long and they finish by rush it and all the efford you pull in was for nothing. So it's not the best way to begin a new account to begin with looong stories :p, and here you and Max have do a exelent job and a good choice !
Indeed the story is short but fun and pleasant to read, with all the details you both have put in even the lazyest reader ever will be able to enjoy the story frol it begin to it's end ;3. Also yiu even put a moral at the end and it was beautiful, it show despite all than can happen it's still good to laugh with a friend and it have plenty of way to do it ^^.
So here is my conclusion, it was an amazing and funny story than had all it need for encounter success, I hole lot of people will read it ! Well sorry for my loooong review but I realy needed to guve you my full feedback about like you stil do it for me and my draws >w< !
D'aww, thank you so much Hake-kun! Much appreciated, I always love everything you have to say about what I create, either alone or with my brother. It means a lot and I'm so glad you liked it~ <3
I will admit, I was a bit worried the story would either come off as too short, too rushed, or too... strange, I guess? But I was proud of it and so was Max, so I'm glad my doubts were for nothing.
Thank you very much for your long lasting support, I'll cherish it always my friend. <3 <3
I will admit, I was a bit worried the story would either come off as too short, too rushed, or too... strange, I guess? But I was proud of it and so was Max, so I'm glad my doubts were for nothing.
Thank you very much for your long lasting support, I'll cherish it always my friend. <3 <3
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