Moving, sad feeling.. I often didn't deal with conflict well as a child.. and usually would try to fade into the background. to be persistently unnoticable, rather than speak out for what I believed in. that's what this makes me think of.. eventually I learned to stand up and speak out for what I believed in.. to say something when I thought there was harm being caused or someone being hurt.. part of growing up I guess.. but I still don't like conflict to this day. I've just learned that sometimes I have to say something anyway.. but this poem makes me think of when I was younger, and just hoped that if I didn't make waves, I wouldn't be noticed, and wouldn't get bitten.. I know that this really isn't a comment about your poem, Aki, but it is one about the things that it makes me think of.. what it brings to mind for me.. it makes me think a little..

Well, if it makes you think a little, that's the greatest praise I can get for this poem *smiles a bit* I have succeeded n.n

Yes... YES... so much YES!

There is so much here it's hard to tackle it all. It's very free-form; but I love that about it; it forces the reader to pay keen attention to each line. You illustrate well the lapse of ethics and self-respecting decency that the world seems to have turned a blind eye to. The lack of coping for the mother; the child forcing himself submissive to avoid further pain; essentially giving up the struggle to develop morals to instead fall back to easier, self-serving interests...

You have illustrated and echoed quite perfectly my own bemoaning of the world 'giving up because developing morals is too hard'. The lack of overall inner strength and integrity that so many hollowly crave; yet do nothing to attempt to achieve.

Faved ^^

Mm, I had actually intended for 'mother' to be as much symbolic as it is factual n.n;; Not just the natural human mother we all have, but life in general as 'mother'.

I'm glad the message by poetry doesn't make it impossible to understand what I'm going for n.n;; Thank you so very much for this, and you understanding what I'm getting at is the greatest praise I could ask for.

As an anthropologist, this is something highly observed in ethnographic studies on enculterization and social entrapment.
Despite fine lines of defined biases and frames of reference and extremities on the issue, you have captured the essence well, especially in pertaining to the industrialized westernized form. Highly is concerned thus as well are the developing nations following the poor example on the crutches of globalization.
Tis a nice form of free fall, flowed very nicely.

To state as well, grandeur used symbol forms of the sacred feminine.
Well respected.
She might weep, However, as ordained and sworn I will carry her sacred banner through the burning flames and darkest nights on the left side of the winds. Inama nushif Alasir hiy ayish Lia-anni
Zaratha zarati Her voice sounds She speaks through the torrent of Deluge and sand the torrent, ageless and boundless .
I apologize for the rant and Ainu scripture, much like the fictional Landen I’m a symbol whore on the case.

Thank you so very much for this. If I can ask for a in depth critique, could you point out those fine lines of defined biases, frames of reference and extremities? I'm glad you thought I caught the essence, but anything I can do to improve would be most welcome.

Oh no I'm apologize for miscommunication. I was referring to human perception in general with the comment of "defined biases, frames of reference and extremities", not in the work itself.

oh! Okay then *laughs and rubs the back of her neck* my bad, I thought... yeah. Well then n.n

DAMN, that was cool. So much imagery in so little text!!!

I love poetry like this, keep it up!!!

haha, I'll do what I can, but no promises n.n;; I don't usually get like this unless I'm in a mood.