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Here it is, folks! I pushed it up into my writing schedule because honestly, I was excited that I got such a good response from my casting call. I couldn't take everyone, and thank you to those that submitted but did not get chosen, I hope you know it wasn't because I didn't want to, but as with casting a Hollywood movie, not every actor is right for every part. I looked into your characters to see if they had what I needed them to have, and most of them worked out well. I did my best to give everyone a suitable part, I hope you enjoyed it. Part 2 will likely be plotted out and worked on post AC.
Summary - After an event that alters the flow of modern history, the world becomes chaotic. A trio of resistance fighters stumble upon a long forgotten weapon, whose return sparks both sides to action...
Starring:
Lauren Rivers, aka Blue.
LaurenRivers
Susanna Carver, aka Red.
Fritz Jansen, resistance soldier
PaulShep
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3660899
Sabah Alev, resistance soldier.
Sabahaa
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2217492/
Emmy, resistance member.
EmeraldSkunk
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2695602/
Katherthan Zeal, Resistance Leader
Kazer
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2569661/
Kelvrin Firkin, Scientist, Blue’s programmer.
Kelvrin
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3052248
Murdock, Lead Villain
ladysin
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3756058
Pete, Operator for Indigo, Red, Green, Yellow, Orange, and Violet.
skunkman001
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2040710/
Violet Star as Lead Enemy Soldier.
violetneko
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3873376
Guest Stars
Teric as Operator of Independence Radio
Teric
Read Part 2 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4085872/
Read Part 3 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4280002
STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
Summary - After an event that alters the flow of modern history, the world becomes chaotic. A trio of resistance fighters stumble upon a long forgotten weapon, whose return sparks both sides to action...
Starring:
Lauren Rivers, aka Blue.
LaurenRiversSusanna Carver, aka Red.
Fritz Jansen, resistance soldier
PaulShephttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3660899
Sabah Alev, resistance soldier.
Sabahaahttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/2217492/
Emmy, resistance member.
EmeraldSkunkhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/2695602/
Katherthan Zeal, Resistance Leader
Kazerhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/2569661/
Kelvrin Firkin, Scientist, Blue’s programmer.
Kelvrinhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3052248
Murdock, Lead Villain
ladysinhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3756058
Pete, Operator for Indigo, Red, Green, Yellow, Orange, and Violet.
skunkman001 http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2040710/
Violet Star as Lead Enemy Soldier.
violetnekohttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3873376
Guest Stars
Teric as Operator of Independence Radio
TericRead Part 2 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4085872/
Read Part 3 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4280002
STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Unspecified / Any
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Yeah, when I wrote that scene I had to come up with a reason why if it was there Spectrum wouldn't have turned it on 10 years ago, so I had to put in the lines where he convinced them he was dead rather than just missing. Since I needed a good reason why Lauren would go to Kelvrin first, I figured that the chip was the easiest reason, luckily for her he happened to be the closest.
I think that overall the story is very much about Kelvrin and Lauren, not in a romantic sense obviously, but in that they're caught up in events they can't control and are just trying to survive it.
Part 2 is going to involve Kelvrin trying to restore Lauren's personality in one of his old labs, while the resistance attempts to contact the United States for help, both of which will culminate in part 3. :)
What's funny is I just randomly got the idea one night, then two weeks later, here we are.
I think that overall the story is very much about Kelvrin and Lauren, not in a romantic sense obviously, but in that they're caught up in events they can't control and are just trying to survive it.
Part 2 is going to involve Kelvrin trying to restore Lauren's personality in one of his old labs, while the resistance attempts to contact the United States for help, both of which will culminate in part 3. :)
What's funny is I just randomly got the idea one night, then two weeks later, here we are.
Wow, that was fast. ;) I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) Unfortunately working on 'movie rules' it means someone has to die. When dealing with a series sort of story you can fudge it and have the characters meet again, but since this is a short 3 part story it meant the end had to be a significant note, so that seemed the only way to go. I gave violet the streak of violet hair so that she worked with the others in the program.
Though particularly in the case of a movie style story where the events are more epic and the scale higher, it's so much more hard to buy if no one is killed.
Anyhow, I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I hope you keep reading when I put out the next one. ;) Thank you so much for volunteering. ;)
Though particularly in the case of a movie style story where the events are more epic and the scale higher, it's so much more hard to buy if no one is killed.
Anyhow, I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I hope you keep reading when I put out the next one. ;) Thank you so much for volunteering. ;)
i surely did and im glad that he is still around although you did confuse him to be a wolf dragon rather than him really being a fox dragon. Im sure you figured that out already but im also sure you were really into the story that you missed it but no worries the story is really interesting and cant wait for part 2.
He's my favorite donkey so far. :) *huggles* :)
I've got the basic plot threads I intend to pursue when I work on part 2 post AC, some characters are being tossed around, but it's likely for part 2 and 3 I might only need one or two additional characters beyond what I've already got, though I think it'll be very good. :)
I do my darndest to try and make my stuff be furry and fun, not just the usual, you know? :)
I've got the basic plot threads I intend to pursue when I work on part 2 post AC, some characters are being tossed around, but it's likely for part 2 and 3 I might only need one or two additional characters beyond what I've already got, though I think it'll be very good. :)
I do my darndest to try and make my stuff be furry and fun, not just the usual, you know? :)
I'm very glad you liked it. :) I think the scene I put at the beginning did a good job of catching attention and introducing the audience to the weapons. :)
I also posted a journal with a list of some of my other work if you'd like to see a few of my other universes. :) Lauren is more or less my good luck charm, she's in most of my stuff. :)
I also posted a journal with a list of some of my other work if you'd like to see a few of my other universes. :) Lauren is more or less my good luck charm, she's in most of my stuff. :)
She works out well because she's very versatile. I can see her in just about any universe, just change her hair or her clothes and she's good to go, midevil, future, present, she looks good in all of them. :) She's a normal girl, so she can be powered up as needed and still is the same person at the core. :) She's got the star quality to be a leading lady, but she can be a supporting player too. :)
I try to keep things interesting and exciting, but not too slow unless it's needed. :) I think Pete did well as the operator, he seems to fit nicely with the computer tablet in his paws handling the technology. :)
A few secrets, huh? Are these ones *I* know about? :) Or are you just being silly? :)
A few secrets, huh? Are these ones *I* know about? :) Or are you just being silly? :)
Well, I do have a role you might be good for, it'd be a featured role, though I can't tell you much cuz it's got a surprise built in to the job. :)
I kind of figured since it's a 'movie' kind of plot that someone had to die at the end, though it may not go that way in part 2, I have something else planned for red vs blue. :)
I kind of figured since it's a 'movie' kind of plot that someone had to die at the end, though it may not go that way in part 2, I have something else planned for red vs blue. :)
Oh, I think you'd kick ass filling the slot I have in mind. ;) *evil giggle* Though as I told the others when I took submissions, you're trusting me with your character and are giving me artistic liberty, plus anything they do under my orders are not canon to their 'real' bio, just insofar as it pertains to the story. If you're cool with that, let me know and Nexii can play a big role in part 2 and 3. :)
Fun read, Lauren! You have a good sense of plot and pacing in your story.
This seems like 'Dollhouse' meets 'Short Circuit'. An interesting, if not dark, premise, and I'm interested to see whether Blue still has Lauren somewhere deep inside. Clearly, there is something there--the tear at Violet's death, her 'thank you' at the end, and the small glimpse of her thoughts that occurred once the fight was over.
There's a nit-picky thing I wanted to bring up here--I see some 'head hopping' going on in this story; where the point of view goes from one character to another to another within the same section of story. For example, when the Spectrum soldiers were first hitting the ground for assault, the action was described from Peter's point of view. In the next paragraph, it was suddenly Emmy's point of view, and it continued to switch as the story progressed.
I realize the need to switch points of view to show different sides of the story and to demonstrate the thoughts and motives of the different characters. However, the PoV switches should be in clear sections (i.e. different chapters, or clearly delineated sections within a chapter). Otherwise, it can create a subtle disorientation and confusion in the reader.
This seems like 'Dollhouse' meets 'Short Circuit'. An interesting, if not dark, premise, and I'm interested to see whether Blue still has Lauren somewhere deep inside. Clearly, there is something there--the tear at Violet's death, her 'thank you' at the end, and the small glimpse of her thoughts that occurred once the fight was over.
There's a nit-picky thing I wanted to bring up here--I see some 'head hopping' going on in this story; where the point of view goes from one character to another to another within the same section of story. For example, when the Spectrum soldiers were first hitting the ground for assault, the action was described from Peter's point of view. In the next paragraph, it was suddenly Emmy's point of view, and it continued to switch as the story progressed.
I realize the need to switch points of view to show different sides of the story and to demonstrate the thoughts and motives of the different characters. However, the PoV switches should be in clear sections (i.e. different chapters, or clearly delineated sections within a chapter). Otherwise, it can create a subtle disorientation and confusion in the reader.
I'm glad you enjoyed it, plot and pacing are my strong suits. :) I try and imagine like I'm filming a movie, trying to place slow moments and such only when appropriate. ;)
I'm glad you picked up on some of the clues, I'm curious if you'll figure out the evil plot I have for part 2. ;) *evil grin* It'll be most awesome, I think. ;)
Yeah, I suppose I do that from time to time, though I hope it doesn't make things difficult to follow. In technical terms I probably should watch that, but most of my readers seem to get the idea. ;) *hugs you*
Your part will be bigger in part 2, and we'll see Richard in part 2 as well, though I hope you weren't unsatisfied with your cameo in part 1. :)
I'm glad you picked up on some of the clues, I'm curious if you'll figure out the evil plot I have for part 2. ;) *evil grin* It'll be most awesome, I think. ;)
Yeah, I suppose I do that from time to time, though I hope it doesn't make things difficult to follow. In technical terms I probably should watch that, but most of my readers seem to get the idea. ;) *hugs you*
Your part will be bigger in part 2, and we'll see Richard in part 2 as well, though I hope you weren't unsatisfied with your cameo in part 1. :)
Well. So. This is great! I'm usually not into spy stuff or politics so I wasn't sure at first if I'd like this. But when it came to exploring an abandoned underground lab......ah, then you had me! And then they re-activated Blue!
I also like that Kelvrin isn't your typical scientist who only cares for his work, not about people. His wish to redeem himself with Blue is noble and of course we're all going to hope he makes it. With the hints of her original personality lurking somewhere inside and the possibility of Kelvrin getting a chance to find it, you have me hooked. I have to know if he succeeds!
The action parts flow smoothly too. I'm not big on fight scenes as a rule, being uninterested in fighting, but you do them well.
So all in all I'd say you were spot on when you said you thought I'd like your writing. I definitely do!!
Now it's on to Part 2!
I also like that Kelvrin isn't your typical scientist who only cares for his work, not about people. His wish to redeem himself with Blue is noble and of course we're all going to hope he makes it. With the hints of her original personality lurking somewhere inside and the possibility of Kelvrin getting a chance to find it, you have me hooked. I have to know if he succeeds!
The action parts flow smoothly too. I'm not big on fight scenes as a rule, being uninterested in fighting, but you do them well.
So all in all I'd say you were spot on when you said you thought I'd like your writing. I definitely do!!
Now it's on to Part 2!
Typically I'm not into spy stuff or politics either, and you can see that it isn't really either. ;) I write stories that I think hook you fast and keep the adrenaline up, and I'm glad that you liked it. ;)
Yeah, that first scene was fun to write, I was looking forward to the 'sleeping beauty' scene as it was. :) Of course, that event is what serves as the catalyst for the rest of the story, quite literally getting the ball rolling. ;)
Kelvrin's redemption is one of the big arcs for this series, which I was pleased that I was able to get a character that could pull off the intellectual, but clearly has an emotional underlining. Depending on your perspective he could be a hero, or an anti-hero.
I'm glad you're having fun so far, I've got a couple of exciting upcoming projects and I think if anyone likes my style, they'll like my less than usual ideas. :)
Yeah, that first scene was fun to write, I was looking forward to the 'sleeping beauty' scene as it was. :) Of course, that event is what serves as the catalyst for the rest of the story, quite literally getting the ball rolling. ;)
Kelvrin's redemption is one of the big arcs for this series, which I was pleased that I was able to get a character that could pull off the intellectual, but clearly has an emotional underlining. Depending on your perspective he could be a hero, or an anti-hero.
I'm glad you're having fun so far, I've got a couple of exciting upcoming projects and I think if anyone likes my style, they'll like my less than usual ideas. :)
I generally avoid standard furry stories, I like to stay away from the usual things and just tell a good story with a furry cast. :)
I've got some pretty darn amazing ideas for the next volunteer project after Steampunk, I might do them both at the same time, just switch off. :)
I've got some pretty darn amazing ideas for the next volunteer project after Steampunk, I might do them both at the same time, just switch off. :)
I don't read much furry fiction. The few furry stories I have read before now tended to be just vehicles for sex. Pretty standard fantasy fare and therefor predictable for the most part. It's so nice to read something with a plot and good storytelling. I love a good adventure. And I'm a sucker for scientific experiments gone awry or misused. Written with furrs as characters adds a new and welcome dimension to it. I'd love to see a full length murder mystery or some such written with furrs! Not a fantasy world, but more like todays world just adapted to furrs instead of humans.
Amazing ideas, huh? I can't wait to see!!
Amazing ideas, huh? I can't wait to see!!
There's going to be lots of people wanting those roles too. There's 13 roles in the steampunk story I notice, and you had plenty enough volunteers for a bunch more. I wish I had another OC I could volunteer with. I'd feel like I was trying to be a hog if I tried to be in two at once! Especially when the first one hasn't even hit print yet!!! lol
Oh I did, but I need more than I have, otherwise it doesn't work. :) Though I always encourage anyone who's interested to try out. ;) In fairness one obviously would not get more than one 'lead role', but if I get someone who just fits perfectly what I need, they'll get recast. :) I try to get at least 70% of the roles being new folks, and some of the folks that signed up for the first didn't sign up for the second.
It serves a two fold purpose. :) I get more fans, and the costars usually seem to start watching each other after the story hits the FA. ;)
It serves a two fold purpose. :) I get more fans, and the costars usually seem to start watching each other after the story hits the FA. ;)
I think I'll wait and see what kind of roles you have available before thinking about anything. I might suggest a couple of my friends check you out too, if that's ok.
I'd thought about how casting people who apply for the parts increases your fan base, but it hadn't struck me about the characters and their owners getting acquainted as a result of being in it together. It's almost like you're doing a public service there, huh? Helping us to find new friends!! =3
I'd thought about how casting people who apply for the parts increases your fan base, but it hadn't struck me about the characters and their owners getting acquainted as a result of being in it together. It's almost like you're doing a public service there, huh? Helping us to find new friends!! =3
Oh yeah, I'll probably wait until I've finished the first steampunk or until I need something new to post journal wise, I may do some preliminary questioning for some things, we'll see. ;) But yeah, anyone you want to toss my way that's great. ;) I can always use new actors for as long as I keep doing these projects, it gets me face time and a fan base, both of which I need. ;)
Yeah, it's something I noticed after Spectrum, everyone in it started watching each other. ;)
Yeah, it's something I noticed after Spectrum, everyone in it started watching each other. ;)
Retitled? I didn't know it had had a title. In fact I was getting ready to ask you about that, now I don't need to. I think she'll apply for the next one if there's a part that would suit.
*squirms sexily in the chair instead of dancing* I was....I was....heeeeyy! Tonights only the 19th! What're you trying to pull? Anyway, the dog ate my homework........again.
*squirms sexily in the chair instead of dancing* I was....I was....heeeeyy! Tonights only the 19th! What're you trying to pull? Anyway, the dog ate my homework........again.
Yeah, the steampunk story only had a working title of 'Steampunk Story', now it's officially Odyssey. Though what I was thinking is that initially the main two roles were intended to be a hetero love interest, but now I'm thinking I might open the roles up to a same sex relationship. Both to stretch my skills and because it'd open it up to quite a few other couples. ;) The ideal situation would be for two 'related' characters that fit the category to work in the lead roles. :)
I could make a really bad pun about how a story titled 'Clockwork' naturally would be easy to plot out, but I will restrain myself.
So before you start to actually write a story, you have the basics in place and know where you are going and where you'll end up? I've read a comment from one of my favorite fantasy authors once that he just let the story lead him where it wanted to go as he typed. No plans no nothing. That seems like a strange way to do it to me, but he's a prolific, popular writer.
So before you start to actually write a story, you have the basics in place and know where you are going and where you'll end up? I've read a comment from one of my favorite fantasy authors once that he just let the story lead him where it wanted to go as he typed. No plans no nothing. That seems like a strange way to do it to me, but he's a prolific, popular writer.
Oh, not so easy if you knew what I was doing with it. :)
It varies. I sometimes start with a concept, create the core cast, and then see what develops, but I always plot the story out before I try to write it. I have a general methodology for how I develop stories, and I usually follow the basic pattern for what each part's job is, depending on how many installments there are. Of course, this doesn't mean I tell the same story over and over or that they turn out the same way, but it has always worked well for me. ;)
To put it another way, part 1's job is to introduce. You lay down the rules of your universe and what the setting is, who the players are. Part 2's job is to expand. Open up new possibilities not considered in part 1. Add new players that may have been behind the scenes in part 1. Challenge assumptions of the audience. Part 3's job is to show off. Try to do what the series does best, show off the style of the story, big climax here that makes fans really appreciate the series... If there's a 4th it continues in that vein. ;)
It varies. I sometimes start with a concept, create the core cast, and then see what develops, but I always plot the story out before I try to write it. I have a general methodology for how I develop stories, and I usually follow the basic pattern for what each part's job is, depending on how many installments there are. Of course, this doesn't mean I tell the same story over and over or that they turn out the same way, but it has always worked well for me. ;)
To put it another way, part 1's job is to introduce. You lay down the rules of your universe and what the setting is, who the players are. Part 2's job is to expand. Open up new possibilities not considered in part 1. Add new players that may have been behind the scenes in part 1. Challenge assumptions of the audience. Part 3's job is to show off. Try to do what the series does best, show off the style of the story, big climax here that makes fans really appreciate the series... If there's a 4th it continues in that vein. ;)
I'm glad you liked it. ;) Did it grab you early on? :) I tried to give everyone an important part to play, no matter what their role was. :)
Excellent grammer, huh? :) That's something I was wondering about, it's good to hear that I did a decent job. :) I know Teric commented that I 'head hop' ie, switch between perspectives a lot, though I am not sure if that's an actual flaw or not.
Excellent grammer, huh? :) That's something I was wondering about, it's good to hear that I did a decent job. :) I know Teric commented that I 'head hop' ie, switch between perspectives a lot, though I am not sure if that's an actual flaw or not.
Yes- pretty much from the beginning. The point at which I'd say it really grabbed me though is when they found Blue.
I mentioned the grammar thing mostly because it was free of spelling and punctuation errors, which always stand out to me. Also I did not find any errors like their and there and they're interchanged- the spelling was correct for your intended use of the words. I didn't notice the 'head hopping' thing, so I guess that wasn't a problem for me.
I mentioned the grammar thing mostly because it was free of spelling and punctuation errors, which always stand out to me. Also I did not find any errors like their and there and they're interchanged- the spelling was correct for your intended use of the words. I didn't notice the 'head hopping' thing, so I guess that wasn't a problem for me.
Hehe. :) That was intended to be the 'now here's where it gets interesting' scene. ;) I bet that was unexpected. :)
Good to know, I think I'm very good at avoiding spelling errors and such, though I do need to go through my latest project for grammer corrections and POV adjustment. :)
Good to know, I think I'm very good at avoiding spelling errors and such, though I do need to go through my latest project for grammer corrections and POV adjustment. :)
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