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A song/poem I wrote over a week ago during a class where we were basically told to revise whatever subject we had to or simply stay quiet. The original version on paper has a lot of annotations about how the song would sound although naturally I'm never going to turn this into a song even if I could sing <_<;
Yeah...it's just a poem, ignore the song part >.<
(feel free to laugh at some of the lines of the poem, I'm aware of how much this sucks)
Yeah...it's just a poem, ignore the song part >.<
(feel free to laugh at some of the lines of the poem, I'm aware of how much this sucks)
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I actually really like this. Particularly this bit:
But that's not gonna stop me, I don't care what you say:
'caus I'm gonna fight and live on, through night or day.
I know I'll fail again and fall into despair,
To fall is my destiny but I don't care:
I'll get up again and again and again,
Even if I can no longer hold sword nor pen!
I'll do it for their sake, if not my own,
Even if they're gone and I'm alone...
If life has no meaning, I'll write one myself
I don't know if you meant to write this from your fursona's point of view or not, but it reminded me a lot of him.
But that's not gonna stop me, I don't care what you say:
'caus I'm gonna fight and live on, through night or day.
I know I'll fail again and fall into despair,
To fall is my destiny but I don't care:
I'll get up again and again and again,
Even if I can no longer hold sword nor pen!
I'll do it for their sake, if not my own,
Even if they're gone and I'm alone...
If life has no meaning, I'll write one myself
I don't know if you meant to write this from your fursona's point of view or not, but it reminded me a lot of him.
Thanks.
When it comes to writing, especially about topics like this things sort of blur a bit, as if part of it is me and part of it is Flames. When it comes to determination and freedom after all, Flames is essentially a more idealised version of me who actually acts on his beliefs. The "sword or pen" bit sorta references this, with sword being Flames and pen being me. Of course it also refers to how both fighting and writing can both be art forms and that both can also be used as weapons (or tools) to unite people and spread ideas.
"To fall is my destiny but I don't care" is another line that reflects both of us, as Flames is doomed to live and die over and over as a plaything for the Gods whilst I know that I shall always make the same mistakes and that I'll always be an outcast but neither of us particularly care because we know we'll get through it somehow.
I could go on but I'm sure you get the idea. While most of the poem is clearly Flames' PoV rather than mine there are certainly many overlap areas and even a few where it's probably 50:50.
When it comes to writing, especially about topics like this things sort of blur a bit, as if part of it is me and part of it is Flames. When it comes to determination and freedom after all, Flames is essentially a more idealised version of me who actually acts on his beliefs. The "sword or pen" bit sorta references this, with sword being Flames and pen being me. Of course it also refers to how both fighting and writing can both be art forms and that both can also be used as weapons (or tools) to unite people and spread ideas.
"To fall is my destiny but I don't care" is another line that reflects both of us, as Flames is doomed to live and die over and over as a plaything for the Gods whilst I know that I shall always make the same mistakes and that I'll always be an outcast but neither of us particularly care because we know we'll get through it somehow.
I could go on but I'm sure you get the idea. While most of the poem is clearly Flames' PoV rather than mine there are certainly many overlap areas and even a few where it's probably 50:50.
We stand together... We won't surrender. -Lyrics from this: http://ocremix.org/remix/OCR02003/
Odd, I was under the impression that it was still fairly metaphorical, at least from my perspective. It's probably less metaphorical than my others as there's some very non-metaphorical (is that even a word?) meanings there but hidden behind them are some metaphors.
If you take the poem literally then the poet is physically falling down, struggling to get up and actually fighting. If you take the intended meaning, all the conflict is internal and mostly not physical but either mental or emotional. In particular "falling, forever falling" is meant to reference the recurring dreams some people get where they fall and another example would be "I'm gonna fight and live on, through night or day". I'm not actually going to fight through night and day (although as mentioned above in the comments, this poem is sort of a duality between me and my fursona where most of the physical and literal meanings would apply to him whilst the others are more likely to apply to me in RL) but it's say that to live on I must continue to struggle and fight against myself and my obstacles.
And it's okay, sometimes we struggle to find the right words to express ourselves with.
If you take the poem literally then the poet is physically falling down, struggling to get up and actually fighting. If you take the intended meaning, all the conflict is internal and mostly not physical but either mental or emotional. In particular "falling, forever falling" is meant to reference the recurring dreams some people get where they fall and another example would be "I'm gonna fight and live on, through night or day". I'm not actually going to fight through night and day (although as mentioned above in the comments, this poem is sort of a duality between me and my fursona where most of the physical and literal meanings would apply to him whilst the others are more likely to apply to me in RL) but it's say that to live on I must continue to struggle and fight against myself and my obstacles.
And it's okay, sometimes we struggle to find the right words to express ourselves with.
Weeeeeell... I think I found the word - this is straightforward, that is. I mean, you write "I'll do what I want regardless of my health" instead of, say, "Rust of no disease can corrode my wishes".
Now I realized why I thought this is too "realistic" for me, I am a symbolist and prefer to use allegory :V
Now I realized why I thought this is too "realistic" for me, I am a symbolist and prefer to use allegory :V
Oh, I finally understand what you mean. Normally I speak with symbolisms (which confuses most people around me in RL) so I've found myself using them less often in regular speech if I want myself to be understood. Plus with the whole duality of me and my fursona in this piece, my 'sona isn't one to mess around, he gets straight to the point...hence why this is straightforward. Still, that's not a bad thing in poetry and as I say, there's still some metaphors there to prevent it from being totally straightforward and simple.
Also, whilst "rust of no disease can corrode my wishes" sounds a lot more poetic to me, it sorta clashes with the feel I was trying to set here, it goes against what I hear in my head in terms of rhythm when I read what I wrote. Don't get me wrong, I think what you wrote is better, it's just not the direction I was going in this time :P
Also, whilst "rust of no disease can corrode my wishes" sounds a lot more poetic to me, it sorta clashes with the feel I was trying to set here, it goes against what I hear in my head in terms of rhythm when I read what I wrote. Don't get me wrong, I think what you wrote is better, it's just not the direction I was going in this time :P
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