
more of the golden goddess. :) tell me what you all think.
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This is either the worst setup to a steamy shower scene I have ever seen, or an introduction to a very good story. Is she feeling guilty I wonder, or regretful? Could she not stop them from saying fire, or was she the one who said it?
If it's a steamy shower scene though, oh yeah baby, nothing turns me on like waking up with the blood of innocents on my face. Scrub that steel wool harder!
If it's a steamy shower scene though, oh yeah baby, nothing turns me on like waking up with the blood of innocents on my face. Scrub that steel wool harder!
Aha, another named enters the scene. I like the rhythm of the layout of this page, it alternates between little establishing shots in panels 1 & 3 and action (dialog) in panels 2 & 4.
Panel 1: Enter hunky man waking from sleep. He seems to be awakened by some light, perhaps from another room? Good quality shading to be showing that BTW. Also, what an interesting haircut he has.
Panel 2: Groggy man takes stock of the situation. It appears that his bed is for two, and he is one short. Why does he come up short with his pet name? Maybe she doesn't like to be called that.
Panel 3: Ah, its the woman from Page 1. And she is in full Lady MacBeth guilt mode. Clever the way you handled the slick wet fur, and yet kept her eye area separate enough to make it clear that she is still crying. The steam fills up the panel nicely, though the steam at bottom-left looks a bit odd. Is that still steam?
Panel 4: This is the most clever piece of layout yet! Male character squeezes in between the bathroom wall and Panel 3! Wow, he is a sexy devil. And he is concerned about our female character's abrupt grooming. Small picky notes: His neck seems a tad too long, the fur inside his left ear (camera right) doesn't match his right ear, and the three ear studs & ankh dangle pictured in Panel 1 are now absent. I still like his haircut though.
Panel 1: Enter hunky man waking from sleep. He seems to be awakened by some light, perhaps from another room? Good quality shading to be showing that BTW. Also, what an interesting haircut he has.
Panel 2: Groggy man takes stock of the situation. It appears that his bed is for two, and he is one short. Why does he come up short with his pet name? Maybe she doesn't like to be called that.
Panel 3: Ah, its the woman from Page 1. And she is in full Lady MacBeth guilt mode. Clever the way you handled the slick wet fur, and yet kept her eye area separate enough to make it clear that she is still crying. The steam fills up the panel nicely, though the steam at bottom-left looks a bit odd. Is that still steam?
Panel 4: This is the most clever piece of layout yet! Male character squeezes in between the bathroom wall and Panel 3! Wow, he is a sexy devil. And he is concerned about our female character's abrupt grooming. Small picky notes: His neck seems a tad too long, the fur inside his left ear (camera right) doesn't match his right ear, and the three ear studs & ankh dangle pictured in Panel 1 are now absent. I still like his haircut though.
I love how specific a critique you are. it really helps me notice things in this I otherwise would not have. It also really helps me envision what the readers are seeing as I draw this. :) I am really glad. (thanks for pointing out the ear studs!) I noticed they are not in any following pages after, either. >D I'll make them go away. I think his neck is a little too long and oyu are totally right about that. unfortunately, it's inked. If I find an ingeniously clever way to edit it, I shall!!!:)
anyway, thanks so much! there is more to come, eventually. (once I scan :P )
anyway, thanks so much! there is more to come, eventually. (once I scan :P )
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