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These are numbers 1-6.
PLEASE LOOK HERE.
My friend forced me to make a deal thyat if 10 people fave this, I have to try my hardest to get this published. As amazing as that would be, I have no hopes for it-- thre's no market for poetry novels like this.
So, please. Even if you don't fave, if you click, I beg you to at least leave a comment. It doesn't have to say anything, just let me know you read it.
PLEASE LOOK HERE.
My friend forced me to make a deal thyat if 10 people fave this, I have to try my hardest to get this published. As amazing as that would be, I have no hopes for it-- thre's no market for poetry novels like this.
So, please. Even if you don't fave, if you click, I beg you to at least leave a comment. It doesn't have to say anything, just let me know you read it.
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gudf56 mentioned for us to check out your work. so I thought woulc check out your stuff. ^_^#1 --- "I but met you at a glance. " <--- you need to edit the "but"
#2---good imagery and comparisons
#3--might want to elaborate more in the end
#4
is soso
#5
I like the ending stanza
#6
I wouldn't use the the phrase "Studies show." it sounds more scientific
Thank you, I think #4 is a piece of crap dipped in diamonds with the help of a metaphor and imagery. >__<
Also, when I said "I but met you at a glance," 'but' has a definition (in poetry at least) of also being able to mean "only."
And number 6#, I can see where you're going from that point of view.
Also, when I said "I but met you at a glance," 'but' has a definition (in poetry at least) of also being able to mean "only."
And number 6#, I can see where you're going from that point of view.
Seriously Russet, this is good stuff. It needs a little polishing in a few places, but I agree with the others. It has potential. It's definitely something I would probably be interested in. So ... this is about a retired man who is finally going to ask his secret crush to marry him?
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