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What happens when every day in your life is a struggle? When you have yourself and a child to support in a dying economy? What happens when everything that has been proven a myth... is real?
Jump into Horror Star. A 3rd person thriller of mythic proportion.
A father and his daughter Miranda are struggling to live in the dying economy of 2015. The fathers job is precarious at best. Then a unknown stranger shows up at his house and says something that sets the father ill at ease.
I know that there are errors. And if I wasn't so tired I would have caught them all. Plus this is only my second time writing in third person.
Please. Tell me what you all think of this ^^
Jump into Horror Star. A 3rd person thriller of mythic proportion.
A father and his daughter Miranda are struggling to live in the dying economy of 2015. The fathers job is precarious at best. Then a unknown stranger shows up at his house and says something that sets the father ill at ease.
I know that there are errors. And if I wasn't so tired I would have caught them all. Plus this is only my second time writing in third person.
Please. Tell me what you all think of this ^^
Category Story / Fantasy
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File Size 14.9 kB
Good start. The character depth is quite good. Third person depends heavily on slow building detail to the characters themselves unlike in first person where most should be spent on the environment. You have a grasp at it and with practice you can go both ways. It is a rare case for one to have solid footing in both.
Good luck with the rest.
Good luck with the rest.
I want a copy of your icon...It soooooooo cute. I love it. Anyhow we're doing good, he's been staying over for the last week which is fun. I'm think our winter is making me want to sleep more plus I'm catching up slowly with chores that I've neglected over the last 8 months. School is going good. I surprise the science class when I come out and throw geekish science type tech speak at them but it shuts em up. Gotta love forensics. Duhast is at classes right now and I'm about to go fetch him then i gotta get on with my winter cleaning. taking 5 for a little rest. How's your days been? Are you still getting to talk with Em even though she's far away? Damn I gotta get enough time to go on msn to catchup with everyone. *hugs hugs hugs* I'm a little hyperactive right now...too much ???? not sure caffine/suger/chocolate one of them. *hugs*
My but your writing has come forward with such wonderful leaps and bounds. Everything is so deligfully descriptive. I remember a time when I would fake having a meal so as not to worry my daughter and make sure she ate...It's a thing good parents sometimes do when times are thin and there is only a little tucker around. I'm looking forward to the next part when you get around to it. Sorry I took so long. *hugs*
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