Comedy answer: put a donk on it.

Serious answer: put a donk on it. This sounds like a REALLY engaging lead-in, but it should probably lead into a more active segment soon, either by establishing a core pattern to play around or by added something heavy/percussive to direct it.

Keep in mind this is the advice of someone with one-half of a working ear who is nearly tonedeaf and has failed to play every instrument under the sun, so take it with a grain of salt; but I do insist it's a very intriguing hook that you should add some meat to.

...if only I knew what a donk was... I barely know anything at all and my program need the full version still... otherwise... this is as far as I can get. *sigh* If you don't mind defining those terms... I'm afraid music isn't my strong point. It's just something I do when I can't find a good drawing inspiration... yet everyone wants me to make "MOAR!" as some say.

and no worries... the only thing I can play is a recorder... |D It's actually very underrated instrument with a cool sound to it. I'm the Recorder Queen.

If only, if only, man. I need to find a crack soon if I can't scrape up the cash to get the full version of the program.. mostly since I don't have the brain power to learn a new program.

Just a joke referencing a bad bit of british pop music...to 'put a donk on it' is apparently the act of adding a throbbing bassline. I really do think a percussive sound would really help tie together and direct the sound from this point onward, but yeah, you may have to look into other programs. I don't do much digital content creation, but I often find I have to bounce between two or three programs to get things done...

...maybe make it in individual clips and tie them together in Audacity? 8V Probably more trouble than its worth, but it's a thought, I guess.

nice, reminds me of that song from Slum Dog Millionaire.
Suggestion...
for every beat do a reload sound (you no, cocking the gun) then every second or fourth beat do a gunshot like this here.
thats what first comes to mind...
good luck tho, with anything u decide to do :)

Yeah... I'll try anything at this point. I'm almost ready to give up and have someone else finish it though...

O_O dont give up. Thats- NO GOOD.
If anything at least work on it together with /louder [insert co-song writer name here].

o3o you should talk to

He does some awesome stuff, maybe he could help

...maybe. I'll ask him.

sorry x.x; i dun know much about music. thats all i could really say to somewhat help.

It's alright ^^;

I got a name for it. "Enter (insert bad guy name here)"
it's pretty cool, and catchy.

Yeah... Everyone says my weirdo mini things are catchy. ^^;

I can kinda picture a high pitched buzzing barely in the background in some parts after this, underneath a faster beat...

That's actually because of an effect I put on it... in truth... there's only one tune in ther.. just with different effects both times it's played...

I meant not that I can hear it now, but for it to be put in later.

Oh I see... I can try to see if my program can do that... but.... it'll be a pain

continue with a drum beat that starts like the begining of this music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9ZWXAGtrVK0 & continues like the flow & speed of this song: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FcLPL8cPQ-8 or ur original beat. u seem to hav a promising correar as music maker or DJ

Yeah... if I had a better program |D

which is what I'm trying to do... do you read artists comments, boy?

It's fine xD you should know better now, no?

get a bass in there

Perhaps vary up the melody some. IDK, that's the best thing that comes to mind.

Not too bad at all, you have a very strong bassline going, though the pauses at 5-7 seconds, and 14-15, seemed a little, strange to me... but everyone has their own style. All I can say really, is to do a little bit more percussion, and add a melody to that rockin' bassline, and see what you think of the outcome. If there's anything else I can do to further assist ya, don't be afraid to Note/Shout me. ^.^

-DJ MichA

My picture is under the definition of weird. :D Glad you noticed! And, yes... I could try that... but, as I mentioned several times in the above comments.. My program sucks. It's an old version of a demo and has so few options...

aha, I didn't read that... well keep up the hard work Friend ^.^

xD I can only try and hope for the best.

XD i think its great so far! just needs to get louder and more up beat with more instruments and random noises 83 *cheers you on*

I can only try ;c; and so far nothing's working... but I don't know any better programs.

yeah im good with putting sounds together but i dont know any good programs either :( or how to use them. i just kind of wing it

;c; oh well

yeh