its prety good, try to give details about Rex's appearence and abilities(u spelled wrong btw) add that to the beginning of a story, talk about the main character in the first few paragraphs

Gotcha as i go I`ll delve into my characters more

I like! Good amount of action and good story line :3 Can't wait to read more! ^oo^

As you begin to develop it is important to show not tell in writing. It is through the description , action, and details where the story comes to life for an audience. Let us know about the characters, give them detailing and depth. A face the audience can know and feel with.
You have some tenses issues, In writing it is better to use past tense instead of future and present unless for narrative purposes as it makes the action flow better to a reader.
Work hard on that beginning it needs to be a plunge to acquire and audiences attentions.
Good luck.

K ill keep working on it i want to get good at writing stories.

Good to see your using a my advice. Introductions are always difficult, but it gets easier over time. Sentence structure is solid here, thought a few mistakes in spelling and grammar again. Do you have a word processor? I find that typing it in that, then copying it over to a text file for easy access works well. Just keep writing the the words will keep flowing.

Thank you my friend I used my word pad unfortunatly,I have no spell checker on my pc as far as i know.

The check certainly helped, I can tell. To get rid of the annoying diamonds with question marks, when you save your text file, change the encoding from ANSI(that's what the default is for me anyway) to UTF-8. A few missing quotation marks and periods here and there, but that's just nitpicking.

How exactly do you change the encoding? (Watch, I just asked a super basic question, haha.)

I'll tell you when I get on a faster pc and my parents arnt around.

When you go to "Save as...", next to the save button is the "Encoding:" drop down bar. Select and pick and done.

I enjoyed the story.
Been a while I actualy writen anything and I am trying to get a story of my own sooner or later.

Seen some spelling and punctuation mistakes.
Kind of funny to see these in other people works and not your own.

I also would like to know more about the main char.


Im just wondering how many mistakes I will have when I get to my own.

Decent story. To be entirely honest, it seems a bit on the simple side. There is no real depth to the story, and I swear while reading it the image I kept getting was somebody reading a children's novel to a group of kids, what with the narration and all. I would avoid using phrases like "One Saturday Rex decided to go to the lake . . . " to avoid that effect. On a similar complaint, put more detail in the characters involved. The evil anthro dragon is . . . well, just that. Nobody knows even what color he is, how tall, or whatever.

So far this sounds like a teaser, if nothing else. I'd say work on your detail, change the style from narration (Unless that's actually what you're shooting for, as it sometimes does work *Points towards A Series of Unfortunate Events* ) to something else, and make your next story about . . mmmm . . double this length?

Lol i know dude theres still some things im going to fix after all its my first story.

Finally wound up reading your story at 2 in the morning. LOL! But I finally got around to it! Well, I do have a few comments to make, but it would be very hard to avoid copying other comments. *chuckles* All I can say is keep on writing! Just like drawing, you will improve as you continue. The story I was working on, mentioned it several times when we last talked, was literally picked apart by one professional critic (and he was a bit of an a-hole while doing so) but I learned, and now I'm completely rebooting it with what I learned from the experience! Still, as I have just stated, try and try again, and you will succeed! This story is a good first step alright, and listening and learning is the best way of becoming a better writer! Good luck, Rex!

LOL i was wondering when you would read it.
Yea i got tons of tips from  oversal
My first story was crap and he gave me tons of tips so i rewrote it and it turned out pretty good. Next up :Biological experiment background story.

its a good story i like it, action is great ^^ and the story is great too

Thanks.

your welcome :3

Feels a wee bit rushed, I think? Pretty good concept going. Just keep writing and you'll do well. ^.=.^ Learn from other writers, too. Read plenty~

Chapter 2!

Unfortunatly no...im not continueing it...it was a test...im currently working on my sonas backstory.

Cool cool can't wait^^

Few more things to get and then ill type it out make corrections then post.

*nods* I hope to start up writing again once my laptop is fixed, I've got my own backstory plus a fun lil one to write now heh...

My its late, shouldn't you sleep?

Vampires dont need sleep at night...besides its only 1:23 am here.

Lol "only"....
12:30 here, and this shadow doesn't sleep... he "waits"^^

G'nite Rex

Night buddy.