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Summary - Several months after the events of part 1, the resistance has gotten their hands on something that could forever alter the flow of history in this part of the country. Meanwhile Kelvrin and the others seek to restore Blue to her original self before it's too late...
Starring:
Lauren Rivers, aka Blue.
laurenrivers
Susanna Carver, aka Red.
Fritz Jansen, resistance soldier
paulshep
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3660899
Sabah Alev, resistance soldier.
sabahaa
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2217492/
Emmy, resistance member.
emeraldskunk
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2695602/
Kazerthan Zeal, Resistance Leader
kazer
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2569661/
Kelvrin Firkin, Scientist, Blue’s programmer.
kelvrin
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3052248
Nexii Vanadis, resistance member
nexii_vanadis
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/1745174/
Murdock, Lead Villain
ladysin
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3756058
Pete, Operator for Indigo, Red, Green, Yellow, Orange, and Violet.
skunkman001
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2040710/
Richard Haskell, Soldier
ThroneZwei
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2963655/
Guest Stars
Teric as Operator of Independence Radio
teric
Lyndon Brennan, USM
General Richard Renard, Fort Rukario
nerdytigerfox
Deceased Characters
Violet Star as Lead Enemy Soldier.
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3873376
Read Part 1 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3926810
Read Part 3 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4280002
STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
Starring:
Lauren Rivers, aka Blue.
laurenriversSusanna Carver, aka Red.
Fritz Jansen, resistance soldier
paulshephttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3660899
Sabah Alev, resistance soldier.
sabahaahttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/2217492/
Emmy, resistance member.
emeraldskunkhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/2695602/
Kazerthan Zeal, Resistance Leader
kazerhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/2569661/
Kelvrin Firkin, Scientist, Blue’s programmer.
kelvrinhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3052248
Nexii Vanadis, resistance member
nexii_vanadishttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/1745174/
Murdock, Lead Villain
ladysinhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3756058
Pete, Operator for Indigo, Red, Green, Yellow, Orange, and Violet.
skunkman001 http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2040710/
Richard Haskell, Soldier
ThroneZweihttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/2963655/
Guest Stars
Teric as Operator of Independence Radio
tericLyndon Brennan, USM
General Richard Renard, Fort Rukario
nerdytigerfoxDeceased Characters
Violet Star as Lead Enemy Soldier.
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3873376
Read Part 1 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3926810
Read Part 3 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4280002
STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
Category Story / General Furry Art
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 119 x 120px
File Size 139.4 kB
I'll be honest here, I was very close to making it definitive Kelvrin die in part 2 to do a scene I was planning for part 3, though ultimately I coudln't decide for sure if it was necessary so I left it open in part 2 to determine his survival in part 3's opening scenes. Even if he doesn't make it, he'll be in part 3. :)
I hope 2 surprised you, it was my goal to surprise everyone with the ending. ;)
I hope 2 surprised you, it was my goal to surprise everyone with the ending. ;)
*evil grin* Oh yes, that was part of the plan. :) It was tricky trying to maneuver it, as Kelvrin knew about her, but I had to make sure it was just so, so that he knew she existed but had never met Indigo.
I was doing my darndest to keep the ending cleverly concealed, yet with clues there throughout the story if you read into it. ;)
And that is indeed the question. ;)
I was doing my darndest to keep the ending cleverly concealed, yet with clues there throughout the story if you read into it. ;)
And that is indeed the question. ;)
Yea we'll see :P. Obviously Indigo will want to finish the imprint first, but after that it seems really open. The ending makes Indigo seem more evil than chaotic but we'll have to see how it plays out :P.
(If you ask me, Kelvrin was not really much more 'moral/ethical' than Pete and Murdock muwhaha :P )
(If you ask me, Kelvrin was not really much more 'moral/ethical' than Pete and Murdock muwhaha :P )
Oh yes, she'll definitely be improving her skills. ;) I haven't figured out who the final villain will be or who they'll be working with, it could be anyone. ;) I will say this much, though, there's a good fight or two planned with Indigo for part 3. ;)
You don't think so, huh? Is that because Kelvrin wiped the six (of the seven) even though he thought they were volunteers? Or is there another reason?
You don't think so, huh? Is that because Kelvrin wiped the six (of the seven) even though he thought they were volunteers? Or is there another reason?
Put another way, would you take away someone's life as they know it based solely on the word of another. Also that he waited ten years to do anything about all this. He could have kept the knowledge that they weren't volunteers secret, and subverted Murdock from within.
That's what I like about stories though everyone can have their own take on the characters :)
That's what I like about stories though everyone can have their own take on the characters :)
Yeah, I was playing it under the 'more than he could handle' angle. Kelvrin realized he couldn't stop them on his own, so he tried to get out and get away from them and forget it all. When Blue returns he is forced to confront his past and atone for his actions... Of course, I do like your interpretation too. :)
I'm very pleased with the storyline I've invented, and I hope you were pleasantly surprised with your role. ;) Now you see why I couldn't tell you what the role was. ;)
I'm very pleased with the storyline I've invented, and I hope you were pleasantly surprised with your role. ;) Now you see why I couldn't tell you what the role was. ;)
Haha yea was just trying to reason it from Indigo's eyes. This reminded me a bit of Kill Bill in that Indigo seems to be trying to wipe out anyone involved with Spectrum, though there could be a lot more going on. I'll have to patiently wait for Part3 to find out :P
And yep I did enjoy the casting :)
And yep I did enjoy the casting :)
Ah, but that's the thing. :) The plotline of 2 leaves it completely open as to what Indigo's real motivations are. :) Of course, in part 3 since it's intended to be the concluding chapter means all will be revealed. :) Indigo will have a fairly central role, though. :)
Were you surprised at the end? :) Did I get a 'no way'? :)
Were you surprised at the end? :) Did I get a 'no way'? :)
(been away in NYC)
Yea with Violet and possibly Kelvrim dying no one seems to be offlimits. The unpredictability makes the action scenes a lot better :)
Nexii is totally The Bride from Kill Bill though you have to admit (by accident or not). Long blonde hair, blade assassin part of a larger group of assassins, amnesia/coma. Seeking revenge (maybe).
Yea with Violet and possibly Kelvrim dying no one seems to be offlimits. The unpredictability makes the action scenes a lot better :)
Nexii is totally The Bride from Kill Bill though you have to admit (by accident or not). Long blonde hair, blade assassin part of a larger group of assassins, amnesia/coma. Seeking revenge (maybe).
Oh yeah, I will totally kill off a character if it makes their role stronger or provides a better scene for them or others down the line. I like to avoid the whole 'you know they won't kill them off' safety net a lot of stories let you feel.
As far as the bride, I dunno, because we really don't know what Indigo's motives are yet. :) *evil grin* But maybe. ;)
And art, the secret answer is yes, at least two images.
As far as the bride, I dunno, because we really don't know what Indigo's motives are yet. :) *evil grin* But maybe. ;)
And art, the secret answer is yes, at least two images.
I think Emmy ended up getting a stronger role in part 2. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it, I had a hard time working up part 2's ending so that it tracked with all of the details and yet didn't give it away early. ;) I bet most of the clues I put in italics slipped right by you, didn't they? :)
Thanks a lot. :)
Thanks a lot. :)
You mean with the 18 wheeler? :) Yeah, I liked that one cuz I figured a fight scene on top of a moving truck would be pretty cool to 'shoot' for the scene. :)
But yeah, Red was intended to appear in parts 2 and 3, her story arc was planned that she appear in more than one installment. :)
But yeah, Red was intended to appear in parts 2 and 3, her story arc was planned that she appear in more than one installment. :)
It was pretty intense, hehe, especially with all of the hints you added in that would come into play near the end of part 2.
I'm anxious to find out how they get out of the predicament of Indigo, from what happened in the first tests it sounds as if she'd have no trouble in dealing with a group of people if she really wanted to get rid of them.
I'm anxious to find out how they get out of the predicament of Indigo, from what happened in the first tests it sounds as if she'd have no trouble in dealing with a group of people if she really wanted to get rid of them.
Oh yeah, that was a fun scene to write, I liked how it turned out, it had a tough job, introduce Nexii, introduce Red, and be a good fight scene while seeding clues in the story. :)
As far as Indigo, the question exists, it all depends on how part 3 starts. The story may pick up right where 2 ends, or it may skip some time and pick up after, I know I want to start part 3 with something big. :)
As far as Indigo, the question exists, it all depends on how part 3 starts. The story may pick up right where 2 ends, or it may skip some time and pick up after, I know I want to start part 3 with something big. :)
That's one thing I did like about this trilogy, a lot of it writes itself. I know what I need to do in each part, it's just a matter of filling in the blanks. :) Part 1's job was to introduce Blue, part 2, to introduce Red, have at least two fight scenes, reveal Indigo, etc... :)
Yeah, I had to make sure all the plot points I needed were hit, and luckily it all worked out. :)
Had I thought of it at the time, I might've had him commanding the military contigent in the first one, but it wasn't really necessary there so I didn't see the point. Though yeah, he's their current lead soldier and will reappear in part 3. He seems to be a gruff sort of soldier, not easily impressed by words, but more so by things people do.
Had I thought of it at the time, I might've had him commanding the military contigent in the first one, but it wasn't really necessary there so I didn't see the point. Though yeah, he's their current lead soldier and will reappear in part 3. He seems to be a gruff sort of soldier, not easily impressed by words, but more so by things people do.
Glad to hear you enjoyed part 2. :) In part 3, all will be revealed. :) Did the ending surprise you? :)
As far as how much more, part 3 will conclude this project/storyline. There may be others in the future, but as far as this continuity, just the three parts will be developed by me. :)
As far as how much more, part 3 will conclude this project/storyline. There may be others in the future, but as far as this continuity, just the three parts will be developed by me. :)
One of the earlier ideas involved you and Teric being the only two people that ran the radio station, though as the storyline sort of leaned in a slightly different direction it seemed to make more sense to do it this way, so I kept Teric since he'd already been established as the DJ so to speak and moved you to commanding Fort Rukario, named for a friend of mine. :)
There we go! Finally got to read this one. Way to up the suspense and action there, Lauren! And thank you very much for informing the entire world that I have a wife and four kids in real life.
Indigo has been with them the whole time! I never suspected that. VERY nice twist there! And now that Red and Blue have been 'freed', as it were, they no longer have the power to stop Indigo. GAH what's going to happen?!
I still admire your ability to conjure an exciting and compelling storyline, Lauren.
I noticed that you're still 'head-hopping' a bit, especially during the fight scenes. Also, your subject-verb agreement are difficult to determine in some places. For example: "Blue looked at her enemy as she extended her claws again in preparation for another attack." I had to re-read that sentence and consider the context (i.e. Zebras don't have claws) before I figured out that it was Red who was doing the claw-extending. I was able to figure it out pretty quickly, yes, but it did jar me out of the story for a second as I stopped to figure it out.
Indigo has been with them the whole time! I never suspected that. VERY nice twist there! And now that Red and Blue have been 'freed', as it were, they no longer have the power to stop Indigo. GAH what's going to happen?!
I still admire your ability to conjure an exciting and compelling storyline, Lauren.
I noticed that you're still 'head-hopping' a bit, especially during the fight scenes. Also, your subject-verb agreement are difficult to determine in some places. For example: "Blue looked at her enemy as she extended her claws again in preparation for another attack." I had to re-read that sentence and consider the context (i.e. Zebras don't have claws) before I figured out that it was Red who was doing the claw-extending. I was able to figure it out pretty quickly, yes, but it did jar me out of the story for a second as I stopped to figure it out.
Glad you liked it. ;) I was trying to be accurate to your character, since it was based on you, sorry if it was TMI. :)
*evil giggle* That was part of the plan, it was very hard to write that first scene without giving mention to Indigo's species or gender! I dropped hints (noted by the italics at the end) to give hints so that when you read it a second time you pick up on things. :) I wanted to go for a twist ending, and so far no one has seen it coming. :) Red and Blue do still have some access to their abilities, though not with as razor sharp precision as before.
I do my best to keep the story worth reading, I always enjoy scifi action as a genre. :)
Can you give me an example of this (maybe in a note?) I've been working on that in my more recent work, but I want to be sure I'm working on the right thing. It's difficult to manage when you have an ensemble cast as I prefer to use, but I'm sure it's doable. ;)
Hmm... Reading that sentence I see what you mean, I think it all depends on how you read it, but it could be clearer, I agree.
*evil giggle* That was part of the plan, it was very hard to write that first scene without giving mention to Indigo's species or gender! I dropped hints (noted by the italics at the end) to give hints so that when you read it a second time you pick up on things. :) I wanted to go for a twist ending, and so far no one has seen it coming. :) Red and Blue do still have some access to their abilities, though not with as razor sharp precision as before.
I do my best to keep the story worth reading, I always enjoy scifi action as a genre. :)
Can you give me an example of this (maybe in a note?) I've been working on that in my more recent work, but I want to be sure I'm working on the right thing. It's difficult to manage when you have an ensemble cast as I prefer to use, but I'm sure it's doable. ;)
Hmm... Reading that sentence I see what you mean, I think it all depends on how you read it, but it could be clearer, I agree.
This is great! Lots of action, tense situations, detailed fight scenes, multiple locations, and little tid-bits on the character's lives and personalities. So much going on, up and down like a rollercoaster. Gasp! And talk about cliff-hangers... whoa! Gotta read the next one now.
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