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*chuckles* just don't let 
trauron catch yah using bad grammar he would chase you with his grammar nazi stick!
trauron catch yah using bad grammar he would chase you with his grammar nazi stick! 
I can help with grammar! I'm a writer!
First panel: I'm assuming attack and enemy are capitalized for a reason, right? If not, they shouldn't be capitalized, since they are neither the beginning of a sentence or a name or place.
You need a space after "tell you.", since you're starting a new sentence. Also, the "you" on "You might" needs to be capitalized, since it's the first letter in a sentence.
The first sentence should be "tells you to".
In the second sentence, "in to" should be "into".
"Died" should be "die", unless you want to rearrange the entire sentence to "You might have fallen into their trap easily and died." I think that would sound better, actually.
Second panel: It looks like there isn't a space between "Uncle." and "You". Just checking to make sure there is.
Also, while "you are" is perfectly fine to use, colloquial speech would normally see people using the contraction "You're". It sounds more natural, so I advise you use that, unless there is supposed to be some natural quirk in your characters that stops them from using contractions.
"I never think" should be "I would never think". Again, the "you are" to "you're" in this sentence as well.
Fourth panel: "C'mon" should have a period or some other form of punctuation, like an exclamation mark (!).
"i" should be a capitalized "I", as I is never lowercase when it is by itself.
Fifth panel: "Yes.I'm" should have a space in between them.
I advise you take off the "now" from "I'm really hungry now". It doesn't add anything to the sentence, unless you are trying to put emphasis on the word. In that case, "now" should either be italicized or bolded, your style of choice.
And there should also be a period after "now".
That was fun. :3
First panel: I'm assuming attack and enemy are capitalized for a reason, right? If not, they shouldn't be capitalized, since they are neither the beginning of a sentence or a name or place.
You need a space after "tell you.", since you're starting a new sentence. Also, the "you" on "You might" needs to be capitalized, since it's the first letter in a sentence.
The first sentence should be "tells you to".
In the second sentence, "in to" should be "into".
"Died" should be "die", unless you want to rearrange the entire sentence to "You might have fallen into their trap easily and died." I think that would sound better, actually.
Second panel: It looks like there isn't a space between "Uncle." and "You". Just checking to make sure there is.
Also, while "you are" is perfectly fine to use, colloquial speech would normally see people using the contraction "You're". It sounds more natural, so I advise you use that, unless there is supposed to be some natural quirk in your characters that stops them from using contractions.
"I never think" should be "I would never think". Again, the "you are" to "you're" in this sentence as well.
Fourth panel: "C'mon" should have a period or some other form of punctuation, like an exclamation mark (!).
"i" should be a capitalized "I", as I is never lowercase when it is by itself.
Fifth panel: "Yes.I'm" should have a space in between them.
I advise you take off the "now" from "I'm really hungry now". It doesn't add anything to the sentence, unless you are trying to put emphasis on the word. In that case, "now" should either be italicized or bolded, your style of choice.
And there should also be a period after "now".
That was fun. :3
Love how this comic is coming out so far. If this is the first time your doing this format, have fun with it! You can always correct the errors of grammar later. Anyway, if this is an alien way of life story. You really don't have to stick to a strict grammar, develop some slang words that are for this world's culture. "BY CROM!!!!"
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