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This is basically for one of my role plays. His name is Night and I must say, this has to be one of my best pieces yet. The story is written below
A Shattering Sin
by Blackedsoul
Oh the wind was so clear on that ever darkening night. The wind howled and the trees creaked and swayed under it. The feeling of depression and anger hung over the air. The stars seemed to shimmer and then fade to an empty blackness that not even the poor new moon could avoid. In the dank forest that surrounded the earth below, A lone wolf stood, surrounded by cries of anger and outrage. They had found him and now he was alone in a trecherous situation. The howls summoned her. A beauty of a wolf, Night and day could not diminish her glow. She paced silently forward till she stood nose to nose with the stranger. To what crime you have admitted shall you be set free, you killed one of your own now thats a sure thing. To now the death you deserve, I sentence you forever more rest in no peace. The wolves around them closed in silently, yet eagerly awaiting the chance to spill his blood.
For what these crimes I have not committed shall you be willing to send an innocent wolf to death for the will of another? The male wolf growled you have a secret lover, who you forsworn, you took him in and cast me out, for his One Deadly Sin you have covered and now send me to death for his bidding.
The she wolf growled in much anger It is for my decision you must understand, you commited this crime now you must pay. I grant these wolves the attacks aniciative, take this wolf out and cast him from the den. Carry away his body to a place far from here, bind him, tear him, bite him to shreds and leave no evidence behind.
The male wolf growled, so inadvertainly he did. But this attack he knew was of no use. The she wolf backed away and the pack did close, to his death he thought was only mere heart beats. But what becomes of the one lonely wolf, who finds that he has commited the crime. Why he yells out in defence of the one other wolves life. and as the others mass in chaos, the one wolf made his flight. Tis the Night you have seen, tis the Night you have heard, this is my story, the story of Night.
A Shattering Sin
by Blackedsoul
Oh the wind was so clear on that ever darkening night. The wind howled and the trees creaked and swayed under it. The feeling of depression and anger hung over the air. The stars seemed to shimmer and then fade to an empty blackness that not even the poor new moon could avoid. In the dank forest that surrounded the earth below, A lone wolf stood, surrounded by cries of anger and outrage. They had found him and now he was alone in a trecherous situation. The howls summoned her. A beauty of a wolf, Night and day could not diminish her glow. She paced silently forward till she stood nose to nose with the stranger. To what crime you have admitted shall you be set free, you killed one of your own now thats a sure thing. To now the death you deserve, I sentence you forever more rest in no peace. The wolves around them closed in silently, yet eagerly awaiting the chance to spill his blood.
For what these crimes I have not committed shall you be willing to send an innocent wolf to death for the will of another? The male wolf growled you have a secret lover, who you forsworn, you took him in and cast me out, for his One Deadly Sin you have covered and now send me to death for his bidding.
The she wolf growled in much anger It is for my decision you must understand, you commited this crime now you must pay. I grant these wolves the attacks aniciative, take this wolf out and cast him from the den. Carry away his body to a place far from here, bind him, tear him, bite him to shreds and leave no evidence behind.
The male wolf growled, so inadvertainly he did. But this attack he knew was of no use. The she wolf backed away and the pack did close, to his death he thought was only mere heart beats. But what becomes of the one lonely wolf, who finds that he has commited the crime. Why he yells out in defence of the one other wolves life. and as the others mass in chaos, the one wolf made his flight. Tis the Night you have seen, tis the Night you have heard, this is my story, the story of Night.
Category Story / Animal related (non-anthro)
Species Wolf
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File Size 23.5 kB
This was one of those where I was focusing, not so much on character but more on trying to make the person understand the weight of the situation at hand. The characters I don't think were needing as much character as a normal story was simply for the fact that, it isn't as much of a describing but more as being within the limits of expectation as well as trying to make the reader understand the mind of the wolf. "What's going on, what started it, and why is this happening." are the three questions I asked myself while writing this.
Now go and give it to me in English.
The shortness provides a small idea. Allow me to take back some of what I said earlier.
My point in this case is to leave the reader wondering what happened. What led up to this situation. I gave them what basically happened, someone got killed. But the mystery as to why this happened. How it happened and how it got this far is what needs to be explained. I of course didn't do that and I didn't do it for a reason.
The shortness provides a small idea. Allow me to take back some of what I said earlier.
My point in this case is to leave the reader wondering what happened. What led up to this situation. I gave them what basically happened, someone got killed. But the mystery as to why this happened. How it happened and how it got this far is what needs to be explained. I of course didn't do that and I didn't do it for a reason.
The shortness, does not allow your point to be fully expressed.
The point of the mystery and everything revolving around it does not leave the reader wondering what happened, due to shortness, because of the shortness their is a lack in character, lack in depth to the mystery, and any point their in to the audience. Basically it comes down to your rhetorical triangle of you vs. audience vs. your text. The effects of the shortness causing a scenario why does the audience care of the murder, the characters, and the situation, and why should they think of it after.
The point of the mystery and everything revolving around it does not leave the reader wondering what happened, due to shortness, because of the shortness their is a lack in character, lack in depth to the mystery, and any point their in to the audience. Basically it comes down to your rhetorical triangle of you vs. audience vs. your text. The effects of the shortness causing a scenario why does the audience care of the murder, the characters, and the situation, and why should they think of it after.
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