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This is the tenth chapter of my novel, Trepidation. Pavel regales with his associates, and more or less enjoys himself. One of them might be onto him though, in regards to his stress levels and lack of snarky retorts. He's called in for business again and starts to learn a little more about Greg. Things are getting more dangerous the closer they are to winding down.
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... fuck. yes.
I don't even know where to begin with this one. Probably with "meaning we could potentially share my bed." Sir, I thank you, and the world thanks you ^///^
Aside from that, this chapter does a good job tying up some lose ends while also leaving just the right amount dangling. I have a friend like Michelle, and it really makes me like her character. All of Pavel's friends are really cool, and given just the right amount of 'screen time' to make them endearing.
Speaking of: LAMPSHADE HANGING! http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.p.....mpshadeHanging Me likey Miller and Lane, especially since you've been teasing us with the doggy this whole story and we finally get to see him. I half expected him to be described as looking like MaGruff the crime dog after all this. I really liked the scene where they look through the photo album. It's stuff like that that really show cases the killers mental descent, which really makes him seem like more of a threat, as if bad Haiku's weren't enough to horrify us already!
... and I called it. I so did, and I always do. Not that the last victim would be in Pavel's apartment, but that he'd be an otter. When I found out Greg was a skunk I just knew it for some reason. It's always weird little things like that. But jeez, nice 'fight' scene. I like how it's way realistic instead of a big brawl kinda thing you usually see. speaking from experience, that is exactly what it feels like when you're almost strangled to death. It really showed off his desperation, though. Oh derailed train of thought, how we all know your harsh greetings~
I think I know what you're gonna do with the next chapter, and its either gonna really suck (for Pavel) or really rock (for me) possibly both.
I don't even know where to begin with this one. Probably with "meaning we could potentially share my bed." Sir, I thank you, and the world thanks you ^///^
Aside from that, this chapter does a good job tying up some lose ends while also leaving just the right amount dangling. I have a friend like Michelle, and it really makes me like her character. All of Pavel's friends are really cool, and given just the right amount of 'screen time' to make them endearing.
Speaking of: LAMPSHADE HANGING! http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.p.....mpshadeHanging Me likey Miller and Lane, especially since you've been teasing us with the doggy this whole story and we finally get to see him. I half expected him to be described as looking like MaGruff the crime dog after all this. I really liked the scene where they look through the photo album. It's stuff like that that really show cases the killers mental descent, which really makes him seem like more of a threat, as if bad Haiku's weren't enough to horrify us already!
... and I called it. I so did, and I always do. Not that the last victim would be in Pavel's apartment, but that he'd be an otter. When I found out Greg was a skunk I just knew it for some reason. It's always weird little things like that. But jeez, nice 'fight' scene. I like how it's way realistic instead of a big brawl kinda thing you usually see. speaking from experience, that is exactly what it feels like when you're almost strangled to death. It really showed off his desperation, though. Oh derailed train of thought, how we all know your harsh greetings~
I think I know what you're gonna do with the next chapter, and its either gonna really suck (for Pavel) or really rock (for me) possibly both.
*Rubs his paws together, rather maniacally*
I'm glad to hear you're enjoying Pavel's circle (or is it just a triangle cause there's 3 of them?) I tried making them realistic, each having their own quirks and what not. They're a fun bunch, though I feel I could have focused more on them, but this story is supposed to be about Pavel mainly and giving some history on his character. You may have discovered that I have a thing for skunks! And also otters! I'm a sucker for tradition, but Officer Lane didn't have a species until I was going through the final editing process, but something just told me, "Yeah he should be a dog." I loved the fight scene personally, though I got the idea to use an asp from a friend of mine. Figured it would be an appropriate weapon. :3
I hope the next chapter is to your liking! It is going to be rather different compared to the rest of the story, I hope it's still entertaining all the same.
I'm glad to hear you're enjoying Pavel's circle (or is it just a triangle cause there's 3 of them?) I tried making them realistic, each having their own quirks and what not. They're a fun bunch, though I feel I could have focused more on them, but this story is supposed to be about Pavel mainly and giving some history on his character. You may have discovered that I have a thing for skunks! And also otters! I'm a sucker for tradition, but Officer Lane didn't have a species until I was going through the final editing process, but something just told me, "Yeah he should be a dog." I loved the fight scene personally, though I got the idea to use an asp from a friend of mine. Figured it would be an appropriate weapon. :3
I hope the next chapter is to your liking! It is going to be rather different compared to the rest of the story, I hope it's still entertaining all the same.
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