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War hasn't been easy on the front lines, and with Dominion forces pushing harder every day the body count will only continue to rise. One soldier learns that death isn't always final. And in the hands of a Voidwalker, life isn't the gift it may seem.
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Not sure of where I want to go with this one. A rough tlstory to outline my character Korrah Voidwalker and her space within my little nook of Tyria. I left the details intentionally sparse, but I feel like this would work much better as a spoken piece than as a story but here we are.
Lemme know your thoughts.
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Not sure of where I want to go with this one. A rough tlstory to outline my character Korrah Voidwalker and her space within my little nook of Tyria. I left the details intentionally sparse, but I feel like this would work much better as a spoken piece than as a story but here we are.
Lemme know your thoughts.
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Feline (Other)
Size 120 x 78px
File Size 46.3 kB
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Well pretty dialogue heavy, but you have good description when you have it. A sense of place and environment description will help. The big thing to find is the so what? They talk and sit so finding the what comes next.
"I left the details intentionally sparse," over details is one thing. However, it differs from good description of which stories thrive. Dialogue does not build scene as we do more than just talk nor does it provide sense of what is happening to the audience.
"I left the details intentionally sparse," over details is one thing. However, it differs from good description of which stories thrive. Dialogue does not build scene as we do more than just talk nor does it provide sense of what is happening to the audience.
Right. Playing this out in my head it feels like it would be better as a performed piece. Consider it a very poorly written script. I'm more stuck on do I reduce the detail further and make a script I then record, or do I push to flesh out a more solid scene? I'm leaning toward the first but that's WAAAAAY more work.
Thanks for the feedback!
Thanks for the feedback!
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