Worms can only fly in the mouth of the predator bird! ( i'll read this now )

You should consider writing tales for children books and such.

I have indeed been told that before; I suppose I really should consider. =U

I appreciate the encouraging comment, Soka. ^^

(And yes, worms can indeed take flight when being carried off for dinner.) x3

We must assume that even if he sprouted REAL WINGS and flew the birds would attack him mid-flight.

Hah, I like the twist toward the end of the tale!
And I especially liked how you gave different speech patterns and rhyme schemes for every character. Bravo, D :O3

Ah! So you noticed the aesthetic differences in the cast's dialogue? =D

Most excellent! I thought it would be flavorful to do so, so I did! x3

Many thanks, Ethan! ^^

ill read this soon ^^'

'Tis not a problem, Yavy! :D

If anyone would be aware of this poem's length, it'd be ME! x3

Do take your time. ^^

Quite nifty! =^.^=

Well thank ya, Tonin sir! ;D

Already told you how much I loved this one~ Twas a pleasure editing it! It was a wonderful opportunity! ^.=.^

Much obliged for lending your grammatical prowess, Joey! \(^o^)/

I'm glad you enjoyed the process and the end result. ;D

wow that was hefty. Very cute though ^_^ no doubt at all about that one!

Hehe, yeah, it's definitely short on brevity, but I'm happy its cuteness shines through! You have my thanks, Tric! ;3

.............

I'm speachless.

I never thought such a simple idea would turn into such a wonderful story.

BRAVO!!!

Hmm, it was pretty simple, wasn't it? (o.o)

I just...couldn't find a way to consolidate your wonderfully innocent idea into a few stanzas. ^^;

It had to be THIS! 8D

Now, I know how you are with long poems, and one has every right to be skeptical about them; therefore, I'm overjoyed you liked this so much! I can't thank you enough for supplying me with such a great idea, Max! \(^o^)/

I think "epic" would be an understatement :D

Wow!---really? x3

AWEsome! 8u

Thanks much for your powerfully brief feedback, Tek. =D

Tremendously well done

*showers you with roses*

I'm glad I was able to sit down and worh through this, it was amazing ^^

FLOWERS! 8D

*rolls around in them* x3

Ah, well, that's some great news, Hobbes; I do appreciate knowing you enjoyed the poem, despite its length, and that you feel the length didn't affect the quality of the poem. ^^

Ohmigosh! That was awesome, As Ethan said, I loved the different rhyming schemes for each character. Bravo, D-Tail, Bravo.

'Twas quite an experience writing, believe me! :D

I'm glad you appreciate the different dialogue aesthetics, as much as Ethan did. ^^

Your comments really mean a lot to me, Poetic! Thank you very much for taking the time to read my work! =O

It was a thrill ride reading it, I felt like I was back in elementary school.

<3
Why, how in the world could I have inspired-- in my own way, I suppose-- such a wondrous piece such as this? <3


You truly do humble me, Deedee. <3

Hehe, the interval of time between me sending you that shout and you making this comment was rather short! xD

I can see you're grateful, but I'm wondering if you read it yet. lol

Either way, it was hard for me not to remember that poem of yours; after all, the hero and level of innocence was the same. ^^

Happy writing now, Poetic! =)

:< I did too read it.
...I did, I swear! D:

*hugs* x3

Hey hey, I believe ya! lol

Don't mind me! ;D

Amazing. All you'd need is a good illustrator and a publisher and you'd have a best-seller of a children's story.

It is aweing to see your mind at work.

Hehe, oh? I've been told that by a few people on this site. ^^;

That would definitely be something to see, I think. =D

Thank you very much for your compliment. =3

I really love this one ^^
Especially the way you described the sun and how day turned to night and back again

Oh, YES! 8D

That's definitely one of my favorite aspects of the story. ^^

I'm glad you enjoyed, Mully. =3

Wow, this really is epic, the lenth of it put me off for abit but today I decided to read it. This is an excellent poem, I like the different personalities your each character and the manner in which they interact with each other is very lively. Well written poem D-Tail.

It iiiiiiiiiiiiis pretty long, isn't it? ^^;

Hehe, they say the longer a poem is the more its quality suffers. I like to think I can smash that rule to bits! x3

Anyhoo, it's nice to hear that you enjoyed it, despite its intimidating length; I myself was surprised that I could manage my metrical rhymes this long. (o.o)

And, yes, the characters were very fun to detail; I'm glad you found their varying personalities to be an amiable part of the poem. =D

Many thanks for your feedback, Rai! :3

In my first comment, "your each character" ???... correction :you gave each charater* XD the using the ps3 internet browser can cause "typos galore". lol

No prob, man! I could read through it. ^^

*Sits musing contentedly, having finally gotten around to reading this!* Incredible. Adorable. Invertebratable. The sheer amount of effort you must have put into creating all those rhymes and metered lines, not to mention having to mentally switch gears between each character's dialogue - it's mind-boggling! As this progressed, did you write it mostly in order, or did you make a stanza here, a stanza there, or even jump around from line to line?

The nicest thing about the length of this, for me, besides the fact that it makes Pill's journey feel, well... epic! - is the great character development. I know, I know, they were the bad guys, but I fell in love with how you portrayed the birds! Just like Ed Edd and Eddy, they make for a fun trio :) Hey, now that they're established, maybe they can make a cameo sometime in a future poem!

Again, wonderful job on this! It really stands out, a poem apart

It would seem you thoroughly enjoyed this childish ballad of mine, Leon. I'm very grateful for your encouraging commentary! =D

As for the consistent meter and rhyme, well, you know me--it's just how I roll! Though, I can certainly understand why you'd think this such a great feat; after all, this particular work is well over 400 lines, and the dialect of each character had to be taken into consideration, as well as the overall plot. ^^;

Hmm, I actually just wrote it quatrain by quatrain. If I became baffled by my direction, I simply took a break: be it a few hours or a few days. =3

And yes, the length of the story did indeed allow character development--an aspect of the poem I rather enjoyed doing! It's nice to hear that you feel they make a good trio. =)

Again, many thanks for taking the time to read my ballad and commenting, Leon! Do take care! :O

That's quite a bit to digest! This is an outstanding effort, absolutely wonderful! I especially loved the characterization. I know you've been told this before, but really, you ought to be published. You deserve to be winning awards!

Gah, indeed, I get that highly encouraging comment a lot. 8<

But much obliged, Leon! I'm glad the characterization could shine alongside all that meter and rhyme. It wasn't an easy task, but 'twas quite enjoyable! ^^